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Click hereas familiar as tequila mocking birds
the tap tap rhythmic roof tunes
play to each metropolis
every plaza, dwelling and
town
but, when lightning travels
they park their hammers
and blow taps
in our public pubs
so here’s to the roofers
as they tap
to the beat of the sun...
I just love this poem, it felt like a song... <grin>
hammers to beating sun...masterful vision
bows humble (~_~)
surprised a little at the end. More down to earth than
some of your recent works. I liked it. sand
Here it is very unclear, what I am reading is "tequila mocking birds" it looks like a puncuation error, I like the idea of "tequila mocking birds"
as familiar
as tequila mocking birds
tap, tap, tapping
rhythmic roof tunes (say this line)
I would shorten this: use line breaks to advantage, word I would take out is "metropolis" doesn't seem add anything
play to each metropolis
every plaza, dwelling and
town
Great lines here:
they park their hammers
and blow taps
in our public pubs