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Click hereBodies wander
Forth and hunger for
Some distant queue
That moves whenever we do.
But move on,
For once I read a troop
Of monkeys starved to death
In its bowl now dust,
And God fearing farmers,
Much like us,
Once raped the land
In Oklahoma.
So move on,
For spirits can rise
Before bones blanch
There or anywhere else,
Which is why
Lord Buddha went
To his charnel grounds
And Christ went to his desert.
As others have said, it's is thought provoking, though perhaps a teensy bit on the obscure side. I'd probably change the word order a little (and hyphenate "God-fearing"), but that would be my style, not yours, and it's a good poem anyway.
So much has been done to our world originally by ignorance but we are knowing now and still it goes on. Well done excellent poem
Triggers reflections on our mortality and our spiritual connections.
I can't quite pinpoint it, bu I think there are a couple of places where the wording could be improved for flow.