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- Prophet...
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~ Prophet ~
Just an unwanted child
Future street corner prophet
They thought him a fool
With a hole in his pocket
Knowing nothing of love
Much less how to find it
It was just another lie
That promises were laced with
And every fall back to earth
Spawned more hatred inside him
As if painting his world
With a charlatans eye
IMspidey/M.M.
Copyright © 2011
- COMMENTS
GuiltyPleasurealmost 13 years ago......calls it like it is - no sugar with his bitter pill but he is right. You HAVE improved so we know you can do even better. Look back over your earlier stuff, recognise the changes. Also read others poems, it will become clear.
Tess
twelveoonealmost 13 years agoyou are getting a little better, but this is so godamn predictab;e, and goes for the BIG statement. Fresher and more local, would be better. A little humour might help. I did not vote. I will in the future. Now got read someone else's. A major rule of thumb, read before you write. First some good stuff, then check out the competition. Right now you are "crowding the shelf space". Adding nothing.
