(you always make me laugh!)

indicate the inner self. TK U MLJ LV NV

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.

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A quick look into the world of Internet Cybering. Behind that anonymous void you can be whatever and whoever you want to be ~ at least for a little while. Like a vapor once the computer is turned off ~ it fades away.

What is it they're always

Saying what a woman wants ~

Pecs and a cute butt?

But there's more ~

It's a sense of humor

And he's got that everytime he

Makes you laugh.

The rest is just the icing on life's cake.

it's never the poetry--it's the poet--the poem is the siren song half-heard in the woods as I run toward you--branches whipping my face and raising welts

beware of using double adjectives before a noun--I do it too but gradually winnow them down on re-edits - you want to put two or three thoughts into one phrase--that's what spawns the adjective--this futile attempt to stuff all these feelings into too little space (that's a general comment--not about you personally)

my breath billowing out like clouds of smoke

I think that's a simile and similes are nearly always weak

"my breath smoking out in billows"

I liked the spanking in the woods story--I only discovered apanking accidentlaly a bit over a year ago and have been totally amazed at the positive feedback from spankees - wish I'd known about the erotic possibilities of itback in my prime (before the Net lol)

I see and hear your laughter and it warms me--here alone on a saturday night.

Take care.

Carl