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O what tangled webs we weave;
When first we practice to deceive.
Sorry no
O what tangled plot lines we weave; when we don't have a spine.
Oh, lighten up!
Why come into a site called "Literotica" just to look for things to disapprove? OK, we get it - you find this stuff threatening. THEN DON'T READ IT!"
The story's developing nicely, and credibly. Keep on!
Does it really take you this long . . .
To tell such a simple and shallow story? So she made a bet with the other couple, and now she hopes to pay off with her pussy? She participated in deceiving her husband into thinking she had sex with this guy, so that she can now have sex with this guy? Won't argue with how they want to conduct their marriage, but seems rather underhanded and manipulative. Does she use these characteristics in other aspects of their marriage? Only real problem here is how long this series is taking to produce.
Please keep writing
Interesting story line. Don't listen to the haters. I would like the chapters to be a bit longer, but keep doing what works for you.
Thanks for continuing this story.
Don't worry about the haters, but some others have given you some constructive criticism which can help you become an even better writer.
What's next?
Obviously Abby gets fucked by John. Do they continue the swap? Live happily ever after as a foursome? Go on a cruise together? Cabin in the woods?
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