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Sorry about the typo
Damn, there's a typo in the title, look past that and you'll enjoy the story,
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This is horrible. Smelt of smelled? You need an editor because you have typos throughout the story. Besides that, the story just sucks in general.
Ok Dave
I gave you three stars because it made me smile, I have to say that typos are bad but to fuck up your title?
I absolutely HATE typos
They show a lack of care and are annoying to a reader.
And in the TITLE, no less? For shame.
That said, I gave it 4-stars. A good first effort. The sex moved a little too fast -- take your time, there's no rush. Molly could have been a tad reluctant, needing convincing to take the first step and then the subsequent steps after it; that would have added to the build-up.
Keep writing.
take her downstairs
i read the whole thing in the voice of daisy from downton abbey
No, Dave...
...we won't enjoy the story, as there are so many typos and errors that it's actually quite an UN-enjoyable experience.
5
Yes the typos were horrible. Really need to use a proofreader. But I loved the story.
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