I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing.
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Anonymous12/16/14
Erotic and romantic
Your story is not just about sex-it's a relationship story that could go a lot further with a little more effort. Define the family relatioships more for example like Leslie's "looking after" which culd be comedy of errors. The sex scene was not defined-one could certianly do better than "she humped me" as if it were nothing at all. Sex is emotional and ecting.
There a tendencyto make it just checking boxes. Sex should be more than just,been there done that;it should also include more than just the missionary position. Amy shuld be so excited she wants to do it again soon. Show her more please.
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Anonymous03/01/15
Nice romantic deflowering, but maybe some forethought and consideration is in order?
He doesn't care about getting her pregnant? Everything else about their relationship was so loving and generous, it would be nice if he acknowledged that sex has consequences. And there is a reason it is called, making love. His love could use some improvement.
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Thank you...
I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing.
Erotic and romantic
Your story is not just about sex-it's a relationship story that could go a lot further with a little more effort. Define the family relatioships more for example like Leslie's "looking after" which culd be comedy of errors. The sex scene was not defined-one could certianly do better than "she humped me" as if it were nothing at all. Sex is emotional and ecting.
There a tendencyto make it just checking boxes. Sex should be more than just,been there done that;it should also include more than just the missionary position. Amy shuld be so excited she wants to do it again soon. Show her more please.
Nice romantic deflowering, but maybe some forethought and consideration is in order?
He doesn't care about getting her pregnant? Everything else about their relationship was so loving and generous, it would be nice if he acknowledged that sex has consequences. And there is a reason it is called, making love. His love could use some improvement.
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