Well written, but the author should have referred to the "big boss" as owner or something else. I had to stop a few times to decipher whether boss was being used to describe her boss or her boss's boss.
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Anonymous07/18/15
Tom Clancy...
In one of his novels wrote "Assumptions are the mother of all fuck-ups."
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Anonymous07/18/15
Annony, hey dick head what the fuck does that mean
Never mind we don't give a fuck. Go some place else you dumb mother fucker
... you rushed the ending in one paragraph!
I know that you're primary goal was to write a story about catching and punishing a cheater. But, you created a personal what we (I) want closure on.
How did he get over her. New wife, dating. What about the kids?
Also, was he tempted to steal their stolen money, and why didn't he?
His revenge was right, let the law handle it.
I still ranked this with a 5, but seriously considered a 4 due to the ending
This seems to be a trend with you. Here is a observation for you. In a real marriage, the husband and wife actually do things together! Yes bizarre, I know; but it works for me,
If his wife even MIGHT be under suspicion, hiring her husband to do the security check is ludicrous! Unless, as we saw here, she was betraying HIM, his inclination would be to protect her, not reveal her wrong-doings.
I’ll bet the boss either knows or suspects the affair and this is his way of alerting him to it. I guess I was right, I didn’t even think of the idea that knowledge of the affair would incentify him to work harder on the case!
I agree with him keeping the kids - he may not be their biological father, but he's the only father they've ever known, and they've been as close to him as any natural child would.
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Anonymous07/30/15
you are a good writer but,
Your don't want to finish the story. Is this your weak spot? I think so.......
bill
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Anonymous09/05/15
meh
a bit too short. would have liked to hear a bit of her side at the end, a longer conclusion. not bad though.
by
Anonymous09/11/15
Pretty good until the non-ending
Then the whole story fell off the cliff. It seemed like you either didn't know how to finish this or you thought this was a good ending. That notion was just wrong. This deserved a much better ending than you gave it.
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Anonymous12/03/15
doesn't make sense
Why didn't she marry the other asshole? He was divorced and she still wasn't married. So why?
because dear annony is a old ugly fag ass fag with ED who hate everything
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Anonymous05/18/16
Started okay....
But it ended with no real finish. It's like you told half the story then
just quit.
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Anonymous06/27/16
Reads like a case file not so much a story...
I understand where you were going, I do. I think you have lots available here but I just don't feel anything with it. It really feels like a case file or outline or something like that. There is not enough color or feeling. Where does he throw-up? Where does he see her smile in the morning after they wake up - but now wonders what she was smiling about? Where is the memory of some strange point that he "allowed" himself to forget. Believe me cheaters always leave them. Where is there any sense of remorse from her in the emails, unless she is a total sociopath there would be, and if she was a sociopath she would not show any concern about the children in the end. That might have been an more fulfilling twist, perhaps she was a mole or complete sociopath.
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Anonymous08/06/16
Similar story
Of serial cheating wife who has been unfaithful to 3rd husband entire marriage - wed 1993 still cheating.HE KNOWS DOES NOTHING even though HER OWN MOTHER TOLD HIM TO DIVORCE THE SLUT. Details posted on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com
She lost her college instructor job in Helena Montana because of info on profile. She coered at least one student into having sex.
He refused when she threatene to flunk him, but gave in when she told him if he did not do what she wanted she would falsely accuse him of sexually assaulting her. She had already had a conversation a3bout himwith her dept head and that person had told her she did not trust student and feared for instructor's safety. Thing is dept head had never met or talked to student...comments were based on fact student had been construction worker
by
Anonymous12/19/16
ok
Who fathered the kids.....
God story until the end. Then wam bang thank you....
by
Anonymous02/06/17
Well-Deserved 5-Star Rating
I guess this beats my having to produce the paperwork for Article 15's and terminating my wife's military service. I can still smile when I think about it.
English
Nice, compact story.
Well written, but the author should have referred to the "big boss" as owner or something else. I had to stop a few times to decipher whether boss was being used to describe her boss or her boss's boss.
Tom Clancy...
In one of his novels wrote "Assumptions are the mother of all fuck-ups."
Annony, hey dick head what the fuck does that mean
Never mind we don't give a fuck. Go some place else you dumb mother fucker
Nice then ...
... you rushed the ending in one paragraph!
I know that you're primary goal was to write a story about catching and punishing a cheater. But, you created a personal what we (I) want closure on.
How did he get over her. New wife, dating. What about the kids?
Also, was he tempted to steal their stolen money, and why didn't he?
His revenge was right, let the law handle it.
I still ranked this with a 5, but seriously considered a 4 due to the ending
Another head up his ass hubby?
This seems to be a trend with you. Here is a observation for you. In a real marriage, the husband and wife actually do things together! Yes bizarre, I know; but it works for me,
Thoughts
If his wife even MIGHT be under suspicion, hiring her husband to do the security check is ludicrous! Unless, as we saw here, she was betraying HIM, his inclination would be to protect her, not reveal her wrong-doings.
I’ll bet the boss either knows or suspects the affair and this is his way of alerting him to it. I guess I was right, I didn’t even think of the idea that knowledge of the affair would incentify him to work harder on the case!
I agree with him keeping the kids - he may not be their biological father, but he's the only father they've ever known, and they've been as close to him as any natural child would.
you are a good writer but,
Your don't want to finish the story. Is this your weak spot? I think so.......
bill
meh
a bit too short. would have liked to hear a bit of her side at the end, a longer conclusion. not bad though.
Pretty good until the non-ending
Then the whole story fell off the cliff. It seemed like you either didn't know how to finish this or you thought this was a good ending. That notion was just wrong. This deserved a much better ending than you gave it.
doesn't make sense
Why didn't she marry the other asshole? He was divorced and she still wasn't married. So why?
1*
fag cuck shit.
5
because dear annony is a old ugly fag ass fag with ED who hate everything
Started okay....
But it ended with no real finish. It's like you told half the story then
just quit.
Reads like a case file not so much a story...
I understand where you were going, I do. I think you have lots available here but I just don't feel anything with it. It really feels like a case file or outline or something like that. There is not enough color or feeling. Where does he throw-up? Where does he see her smile in the morning after they wake up - but now wonders what she was smiling about? Where is the memory of some strange point that he "allowed" himself to forget. Believe me cheaters always leave them. Where is there any sense of remorse from her in the emails, unless she is a total sociopath there would be, and if she was a sociopath she would not show any concern about the children in the end. That might have been an more fulfilling twist, perhaps she was a mole or complete sociopath.
Similar story
Of serial cheating wife who has been unfaithful to 3rd husband entire marriage - wed 1993 still cheating.HE KNOWS DOES NOTHING even though HER OWN MOTHER TOLD HIM TO DIVORCE THE SLUT. Details posted on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com
She lost her college instructor job in Helena Montana because of info on profile. She coered at least one student into having sex.
He refused when she threatene to flunk him, but gave in when she told him if he did not do what she wanted she would falsely accuse him of sexually assaulting her. She had already had a conversation a3bout himwith her dept head and that person had told her she did not trust student and feared for instructor's safety. Thing is dept head had never met or talked to student...comments were based on fact student had been construction worker
ok
Who fathered the kids.....
God story until the end. Then wam bang thank you....
Well-Deserved 5-Star Rating
I guess this beats my having to produce the paperwork for Article 15's and terminating my wife's military service. I can still smile when I think about it.
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