Assumptions

Wow

That was harsh. Fucking worthless cunt and her jerkoff lover. Before and throughout their whole marriage. I hope they enjoy their life sentences in prison. Fucking stupid losers.

Five Stars

I fucking hate these losers who unknowingly raise someone else's bastards and then wants to keep raising them after they learn the truth. I'd like to see one fucking story where the guy finds out and says "Fuck this Shit" and tosses the little bastards into the system.

I actually liked this story...

I even agreed with the choice of the jilted husband in accepting responsibility for children that he had raised, but were not his. Just because the wife and the lover are lower than pond scum on the evolutionary scale doesn't mean that the children should suffer. Besides, the author never specifically said that the kids were in fact not his. All the author said was that a DNA test would be one of his next steps, but it was never revealed if the kids were his or the lover. If you choose to believe that the kids are the result of the affair then that is your choice. If you don't, then that is your choice as well.

5 Stars.

CAREFUL PEOPLE ASSUME NO ASSUMPTIONS

people in love always do. TK U MLJ LV NV

To Anonymous

So what we have here is 3 innocent children, early teens or younger, who love and depend on the man they think is their father. And your solution is to throw the little bastards on the system. Grow a pair, man.

She deserved all...

She deserved all the years in prison...He had loved the children as his own for a long time...he had to save them from being in the world without parents...Good story...

@judge1179 re Paternity

No, he said MUCH more than that he was going to have a DNA test.

He had her EMails detailing how she had sex only wit her lover during her fertile periods, then the kids were "coincidentally" born a couple of weeks early.

He told her boss that the kids weren't his.

Not proof positive without the DNA test, but pretty definite.

I am far from an expert, but I think you MAY be exaggerating a bit on the sentencing.

First of all, while Defense contracts are involved, unless they are selling info to foreign governments it is "only" corporate espionage and wouldn't fall under the kinds of statutes that you are thinking of.

Second, even traditional espionage doesn't ALWAYS bring a life sentence.

BTW, I DO agree that he should keep the kids. He loves them, and he is the only father they know.

sorry but

why stay with the kids?
its better to give them...to relatives.
they are the prove of cheat lying and more...
if i was him... i will erase everything, the kids included. sorry but in the real world
thats will happen.

Thought the buildup was pretty good

and I was wanting more, when it was all very neatly and quickly wrapped up. Oh well.

twentyseven

read the story again because i believe it was simple but to deep for you..

Yawn

Sorry, but this story is incredibly boring. There was no tension or drama, and certainly no eroticism. It was just a description of a hacker hacking. If this is supposed to fall under the "and more" clause of the Loving Wives description, then the category has lost all meaning.

Could have been a lot better

A little too quick and easy. The plot was very interesting but the execution failed. Writer should have drawn it out a little. The story was such a blur that I didn't have a chance to feel what he felt. I would be interested in a rewrite of this story if the author chose that. In the rewrite I have a few suggestions.

I suggest that we hear a little bit about the marriage before the discovery so that we can take the journey with the husband. What is their relationship like? What is it like with the kids? Does she act loving or is she just cold to him?

Then a few examples of her ambiguous interactions with her boss that could be interpreted either way would add a little tension. Did they dance a little too closely? Did they talk a little too familiarly? Maybe we can hear about the husband questioning her about it and she telling him that he is being paranoid. I'm sure that they had an argument or two about it.

Then a little bit more of a confrontation with the wife instead of him yelling two sentences to her. Maybe we can hear her explanation of why she screwed him over. Is she sorry? Does she feel bad or is she just a sociopath? What about her relationship with her kids? What does she feel about that?

Like I said, this story could have been a lot better. Not a fun read as it is though.

Keep The Kids?

It seems like virtually all of these stories that end up with a true cuckolding, that is unknowingly raising another man's child or children, the guy wants and keeps custody, without any angst or real thought. While noble, in reality I would think that would be a hard thing to do. Raising children is a hard job. I assume that he's around 35, still young enough for a full life, and the former wife has living parents. He'll spend vast amounts of his time dealing with those girls, and will have little time to devote to rebuilding his own life, let alone experiencing the real possibility that their very presence will only remind him of what's been done to him. A really, really good man might do that and do it well, but I doubt that very many would given these circumstances.

Akin to Star Wars with Darth Vadar referenced only in the third person

In other words , lame. Characters both good and bad drive a story or the whole deal is moribund. That is all.

If anyone cares...

The sentence for government contracting fraud is generally two years in federal prison and a financially debilitating fine (often in the millions of dollars). Trust me. It's part of my job description to know this.

As far as the story goes, adding a little bit more intrigue would have made it more fun to read. A good start might have been to put the list of the protagonist's wrong assumptions at the end of the story and make them his conclusions about his relationship. And to make it more erotic, maybe have the protagonist read some correspondence between the two lovers that describes great sex between the two.

All in all I think it was a pretty decent story concept. Being sort of a spy story, it could have been told with a little more intrigue. Maybe add some interaction between the wife and the husband that shows her trying to cover up what she is doing.

PLEASE

THis crap should be in NON EROTIC.So bad..

Nice, but too quick

Nice little story Goo; I would have liked it more had there been more interaction between husband and wife upon her return. Why did she do this to him? A little more explanation would have been helpful. Also, the BTB factor was just a blip. Both she and her lover deserved more written pain or embarrassment.
To the Anonhole who thinks that parenting is only biological; you must not have kids. Parenting is about nurturing day to day; the scraped knees, teaching to ride a bike, birthdays, holidays, vacations, little league, and a lot more. Adoptive parents and step parents aren't the sperm donors; but the bound is just as strong! So your comments are $%#@*& goofy.
I look forward to reading more of your stuff.
BDEarth

3*s

I thought the story was very good. Unfortunately, it could have been much better .
This is almost all potential and very little performance.

With a couple together more than 12 years and 3 children. Embezzlement ,industrial sabotage , cheating and denial of children. Wow the drama could have filled dozen of pages and multiple chapters. We cannot judge what doesn't occur ! So 3*s.

You remind me of the old Atlanta braves baseball teams ,from the '80s. So much talent and ability; so little accomplished!!
I believe you like it that way.


AMerryMan

No surprises in this outline for a story

I did enjoy reading it but felt a lack of human contact and dialogue. Certainly he was there to deliver the kids and is as connected to them as far as possible, so it was not surprising that he wanted to finish the job. The surprise to me is that the kids took the loss of their mother well.

****

For having just started to have your work published herein, you're doing fine. Don't let the trolls get you down. I imagine time restraints can be a bitch when trying to write a story. Keep, at it , mate. You'll come around okay. Cheers!

I get tired of the noble

cuckold 'daddy' who just can't abandon the kids that aren't his. to hell with that - send the bitch to jail and turn the little bastards over to the system, or her parents, or whatever, and get them the hell out of my life, they are no kin to me...

re: Just kleep writing and don't do anything but laugh at the trools

Odd that bonnietaylor2 would recommend the writer laugh at bonnietaylor2, who by far meets the definition of troll than anyone who actually talked about the story.

Good

Good but cold. It felt like it was written by the computer nerd protagonist. It had a asbergers feeling to it.

Thanks for the offering.

the children

Was she planning to leave the children behind when she left with her lover and the millions?
Why I ask is that it seems that they are well attached to him, enough so that they take to losing their mother without too much drama.
If she was taking them with her she should have worked to make them more distant to the husband.

I can understand the years of loving these children and the knowledge that they are as innocent of wrongdoing in this as he is, could cause him to keep them.
Had their mother poisoned his relationship with them then dumping them on the maternal grandparents would be more reasonable.

It seems odd that she wanted her lovers children

But appeared ready to leave them behind. Or did she love them? Likewise, why would the kids never see her again? Sure she cheated on the man they called dad; but she's still their mom.

Likewise, why the fuck would her boss involve the husband anyway? Wouldn't it be better to call in a neutral third party? That way there could be no evidence of bias.

Gets a one star.

RE: Yawn

`Sorry, but this story is incredibly boring. There was no tension or drama, and certainly no eroticism. It was just a description of a hacker hacking. If this is supposed to fall under the "and more" clause of the Loving Wives description, then the category has lost all meaning.`

This coming from a Condescending, Pompous, AssHat who turned off all voting for everyone of his LW stories. But he comes right on in and `Trashes` another LW author, and I am 99.99999999999% certain he also `Voted Down` what is offered. Joey The Pud Puller is just having his typical little `Hissy Fit` he is known for when things don't go his way.

I liked your story. It burnt up a few minutes for what is turning out to be a boring afternoon for me. Keep writing and don't pay attention to the Troll's around here. Particularly the AnonyFucks .........

I give it 3 stars...

It is a good premise and plot. But so much more could be written. You could have written 3 to 5 chapters and made an interesting tale and still have a good BTB ending. So the story is too short.
Also you continually misspelled "Defense" and had other errors. The premise if having sex at fertile times with lover and "withholding" from hubby then fuck his brains out when she has a fetus in her is plausible. Since he raised the kids, and they considered him their daddy, they were his, if not biologically. I agree with KarenE, the sentencing would not be right for industrial espionage. Do your research. But please keep writing and submitting good cheating wife getting caught stories.

Terrible story line

Although I would have sued to have the children's names changed and started a new life.

Good plot, but the timeline stretches credibility.

Seems impossible that she could have pulled off a loving wife and mother routine for what, 15 years? She could have had her lovers children as a single mother, so the ploy of marrying this guy just for a meal ticket seems far fetched. Not saying such women could not exist, but the husband had to be incredibly dense, and the marriage unbelievably shallow, for this to work. And her relationship with her kids? Pretty much unexplored in your story. I so see a sequel where the kids visit her and sperm donor in prison, telling her that she no longer exists in their lives or their memories. And showing both her and sperm donor their recent tattoos, marking them as their fathers children. He of course will also have had their names tatooed over his heart. Bitch and sperm donor are allowed to wallow in their dispair, and their remaining life in prison as punks and bitches for the alpha inmates. Sweet.

Good; could have been longer

This was a good story, but seemed a little rushed at the end. I don't think that you had to draw it out into more chapters, but you could have given us some insights into the wife's character and thinking. Why marry him at all? Why carry on the charade for so many years? Did she care for the husband at all? There were a lot of unanswered questions. The answers to these questions would have made the story stronger. Thanks for the story; it was entertaining as far as it went.

totally incompetent boss, and feds

no one but the cheated on husband can find the "truth"??? . the owner of the company who employed our protagonist's wife, and her lover has asked for his help in discovering whether or not fraud has been perpetrated against his own business.
even though phone, email, and bank receipts are all conveniently kept in permanent records for 17+ years.
why if they had millions were the cheaters waiting so many years before they slipped away?
what was the faithless wife planning to do as she left with the father of her children, with the kids?
what a charmer her boss was, did not want a divorce from his wife, nor did he want to marry the mother of his children. such a nice guy.
why, when the husband discovered how he had been deceived, and he had the account number in the Caymans, didn't he just transfer the money to another (his) account and leave the cheaters to fend for themselves?
Instead, he watches as his wife and her lover are arrested, her (not his) children are sent into foster care, and he goes back into his mundane job, sans wife, and children, without enough income to maintain the household expenses, and the subject of a massive whisper campaign regarding his culpability in her felonious behaviour.

It could have been a great story

Way too short , and it did not add up! Dna his kids or not. Is any women that stupid to do that to her husband. The deception was over the top. Why would the. Boss hire him he could have covered up the evidence , 🐤

3.85

It's funny. Javmor recently made a comment on another story, where he described how the Loving Wives rating system works. It was a brilliant observation, and serves as an incredibly accurate predictive model.

Here we have a "story" where all the action takes place "off-screen". We're told that the main character's wife has been a serial cheater for more than a decade, without drawing any suspicion whatsoever from hubby. Her personality, character and motivations are never divulged to the reader, so to us, she's nothing but a faceless, cardboard cutout. In fact, she doesn't even merit a single line of dialog in the entire piece.

The husband, as usual in these stories, is a righteous and heroic individual who possesses some superpower (in this case, hacking) that allows him to discover his cheating wife's shocking infidelity. The reader is forced to suspend his disbelief a number of times as one irrational plot device after another is revealed. This woman purposely had three children with her lover? Why? Is she a sadist? A Nazi? Satan himself, disguised as a secretary? This is left to the reader's imagination.

None of this matters, though, because according to the Javmor formula, this story will receive a high rating because the cheating wife ends up imprisoned in the end. That is the one and only criteria that LW readers apply. True to form, this little one-pager that is filled with so many gaping plot holes is sporting a respectable 3.85 rating.

Well done, LW readers. You've broken the Internet.

What a silly

burn the bitch story. It was entirely about a geek and his computer. But to please the burners nothing more is required.

Calm down there swinger joe

It's not like the story broke 4.0.

Just because guys don't want to read stories about wife sharing, cucking, or watching 8 guys do your wife doesn't mean that this story is bad.

It was short, not enough depth, and no personality or interaction from the wife.

A good start...

... but like too many others, lots of setup with a quick ending... need to work on properly completing the story.

4 stars

No suspense. One of my children from my first marriage may not be mine. I will never DNA test......she is mine regardless. She says her mother is a slut whore and she is proud to be like her father. She hates cheaters.

meh

meh....

OK ok...

You unloaded the conclusion on us up front, and that sort of ruined it. There was, as others have said, a good build up, everyone knew what was coming so it wasn't that interesting.

Regardless of the DNA they're his kids. They're innocent. Now it's his chance to go out and find someone who'll love him and his kids.

One last thing. I'm just a big enough prick to want to send mom pictures of the kids as they grow up. I'd want to send her the pictures at Disney World, Hawaii, Paris, Venice, the Bahamas, scuba diving, Nashville, skiing, and all kinds of other outdoors things she'd never get to do inside prison. It would be even more fun to send her any pictures of the second wife on the honeymoon. I'd want that honeymoon to be some place the miserable wench had always wanted to visit. Ha ha you missed it! Maybe when you get out when you're seventy!

FIVE

A great big FIVE----I like the BTB stories.

Good Read***

Thanks for sharing.

A MAJOR RULE IN THE MARRIED HANDBOOK

Never Assume No Assumptions. TK U MLJ LV NV

Last assumption, i would never hurt my wife, very wrong assumption

if she ever gets out of jail, she wont last long

Damn

It takes a big man to raise children he knows aren't his. However he had them from birth so they are his children, emotionally and spiritually. Fucking worthless cheating wife and mother of these children got what she deserved. Her jerkoff lover also.

Stupid

Do part two where the ex wife want her husband and childern back

I'm astonished that he had 15 years experienced with this woman.....

....and never had a single suspicion?????
No. Damn. Way.
No one that connected and self aware is that gullible. No IT groink is that trusting. No husband believes that where none of the kids looks at all like him that they are his.

I had an interesting experience at a neighborhood barbecue about 4 summers back. Our neighbors 3 doors up on the opposite side of the street seemed like a great couple. They had three kids, ages 9, 7 and 4. All had some resemblance to the wife, but none to hubby. In a conversation late in the day, after folks were pretty well oiled up, another neighbor talking to us and this above couple said with some slur in her voice, "Mary, your kids are all just gorgeous! They all look just like you and some blond Nordic God....who's the father?"
Mary blanched and paled. It was dealt silent for a moment,then Mary started to stutter and froth. David (a tall, swarthy, but handsome man) interrupted her burbling and said, "Yeah, honey, who's the father? Why not include the details?" He gave her a murderous look that thoroughly squelched any response, said, "Don't go away, stay right here," and stomped off into the night...towards home.
Mary had started crying and collapsed right there. That got a lot of attention and several gals got her up and took her into the house to calm her. About 20 minutes later we heard rubber burning as (apparently) David's car peeled out of the drive and up the street into the rest of his life....apparently, he'd had suspicions for a very, very long time, but had foolishly never acted on them.
Someone else at that party was very disturbed. She and her husband fussed about for a few minutes, separating themselves from the group and engaged in an obviously tense dialog, then left a short while after Mary's collapse. Later it came out that wifey knew of Mary's "situation", and had remained silent within the circle of friends and neighbors.
As you might guess, David and Mary divorced. David sued for paternity tests and it was proven the children all belonged to the same man....not David. The court held that since he'd raised them as his own for so long, he knew and accepted her cuckolding and granted Mary full support and separate maintenance.
Guess what? David evaporated after beating her lover to death and Mary and her three bastard children were forced to go live with her mother. True story.
Oh, the other couple divorced. It seems he no longer trusted and couldn't live with a woman that would keep something that far-reaching to herself. He believed that she'd fucked around, although was never able to prove it. They didn't have children yet, but for him the blush was well off the rose. I don't know any more detail, but apparently, she got nothing in the settlement. Also a true story.
You really don't need to go very far or dig very deep to get material of the highest caliber to write about. I say that with tongue in cheek.
And, as they say, the best fiction has roots in reality.
Keep trying. Your writing is technically very good...you just need to work on the storyline and do frequent reality checks. If you ask us to believe something that goes beyond the normal realities of life, you have an obligation to provide a device, a vehicle to make that something acceptable or even believable. Fail to do that and you get people calling bullshit, or otherwise criticizing your story.
Keep trying. If you are willing to learn from the feedback, you'll likely hit on something that will win hearts and enliven minds and libidos to your great elation.

this was a good one

i know its a story but 17 years an he did not have any idea his wife was cheating on him. I find that part unbelievable , I can see him taking the kids emotionally and loving him as the real and only father they knew. so with a life sentence he has no problems going forward. I wonder what his fee was in all this. he should have been well rewarded. for a tech guy how did she get away with blatant cheating..

excellent!

i love stories where the cheating wife gets her punishment.