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Loving this story.
plz continue!
So happy that you continued to write! Waiting for the next chapter!
Absolutely love these characters and your writing. Thanks.
Loved the new chapter, but he's obviously thinking with his little head now. Threaten rape (which it would be at this point) when trying to calm a woman out of a panic attack!?! Could this possibly be the worst blind date ever? Having family fix you up often turns into a cluster f*ck. :D:D:D
This would be a great cliffhanger if the length of time between each time you post a chapter weren't so long. The chapter is too short and given that this is an erotic fiction website, it's time that some erotic scenes start to materialize in this story. To leave off this chapter with such a cliffhanger is disappointing, knowing that it'll be awhile before the next chapter is submitted. It's more likely you'll turn away your readers rather than keep them hanging on.
Your writing is really good but your chapters are too short, given the length of time between each chapter. Extending this chapter and having the two main characters finally connect physically would've been the better way to go.
Just my 2 cents. Thanks as always for sharing your story.
Auch...
First of all - glad to see this fine story moving along :-)
I must admit though that the last sentence in this chapter to me seemed a bit out of character - even for Jared.
You get a four from me ;-)
why?
why haven't you continued this story?
Haven't heard from you in awhile...
Are you planning on updating this story? I hope you do! :-)
Could you please continue this story. It has been too long now
writing
I just want to explain why this story is taking so long to write. I am actually writing my dissertation atm and so I barely have any time to continue writing this story but I try to as often as I can. I will continue writing this story because I love the characters and cant wait to write what happens next. I hope you don't mind waiting and can hold on for the next chapter :) x
Encouragement
Enjoying the character development and can't wait to see where this goes. Goodluck with the dissertation xx
I'm so glad you want to continue this story it is one of my favourites.
Great !
This story has so much potential! I can't wait for more!!!
please.. continue this story... we need you!
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