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Well Done
Well written, raw brutal sex. Will there be a part 2?
Pure torture
And you thought this would be entertaining to read? UGH!
Hope there's a part 2.
When I think of it
There will be a part 2...
Mr. Ugh
Mr. UGH, I'm sorry if you were offended. But I'm curious about what exactly you expected when you read a story titled "Kidnapped and Defiled".
Sorry...
You lost me when you wrote some of the dialogue the way you did. I prefer reading stories where those in charge sound educated, even if they do have an accent, and dislike accents being "written" into the dialogue versus described outside of the dialogue. Perhaps if it were reported with that fixed i might get more into the story.
Well wishes.
Dropping straight into the story in progress is servicable. I see no purpose in Francha the puta. She was simply annoying. A predator doesn't need a reason for what it does, but 'because I can' doesn't generally satisfy in a story. Is there anything here beyond random garden variety abduction and abuse? If so, I hope it is not garden variety 'open the poor wall flower up to the wild world of carnal delights and then whore her out.'
The story's plot
The story is an extrapolation on John D. MacDonald's "The Deep Blue Goodbye", written around 1965. Hence the presence of Fancha. In the book Mrs. Atkinson does find herself in a distressing situation of sexual exploitation and domination; I simply spelled out the details of her bondage, which of course were only hinted at in the novel.
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