Only thing wrong is the story is too short. Great build-up, but no staying power. Keep writing!
This was my first attempt and I already see a few things I would change-- including the length and build-up. Next time I'll make it longer ;)
It's not bad, but a little too short.
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wow!
Only thing wrong is the story is too short. Great build-up, but no staying power. Keep writing!
I agree!
This was my first attempt and I already see a few things I would change-- including the length and build-up. Next time I'll make it longer ;)
It's not bad, but a little too short.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Hotel Stranger Sex or
More submissions by Erinteresting.