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Totally Inept
Just because you overcook the prose with a bunch of "darkness" doesn't make it deep. Completely unclear if the two characters are humans, werewolves, anthropomorphic dogs or what. Didn't even manage to put anything in the story that was described in your tagline. Go back to the basics of clearly-described details and action before you try to delve into a character's psyche.
ummmm
I agree with the previous poater. That stpry was nothing like your description
And the darkness foghting within was the dumbest thing I have ever read. Are the characters dogs humans werewolves? Did you ever read yoyr story outloud for grammatical issues?
Intrigued
While the beginning was slightly confusing and slow I actually really enjoyed this story by the end. I would personally love to know more about these characters, who and what they are, as well what kind of world they inhabit. I hope you write a follow up.
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