Not the greatest at this sorry, and why would i hire anyone to edit this? just sharing my story for horny people who like
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Anonymous12/16/14
re: Poor writing
No, learn basic English. I don't expect professional level writing, but I do expect some evidence the poster (can't really call it a writer) passed grammar school English. None of that exists in this mess with the run-on sentences, shitty punctuation, non-existent sentence structure, phrases that just don't make sense (she put on the porn bulls hammering white trophy wife's just like her.), etc.
This stream of conciousness is so disjointed that you need a ghostwriter, not an editor. You have a basic theme, i.e. You want your wife to go black. Beyond that, you have nothing but a page of pseudo random words completely divorced from coherent thought or sentence structure.
Wow bud that was a really bad insult good thing I don't let angry virgins get me down, i knew guys like you in High school you may be smarter and have better grammar but you're the loser here, go get laid pal it will change your life
I was easily one of the worse students in my school besides math of course, dumb jock who's glory days were in HS is what you all think, but owning my own business and being semi wealthy as an adult are the glory days here!!! wait till the next story i am gonna bunch the words up so bad just to watch you spelling bee champs get all angry lol
you guys come on here to jack off to stories of situations you'll never be in so just shut up, unless you are a pro writer i am willing to bet you make zero dollars off of your perfect sentence structure lol
Need to slow down and expand on each sentence instead of running them all together. I like the subject but did not care for the way you presented it. And No, I did not come in here to "jack off" but to enjoy.
English
Poor writing
You should hire an editor before posting more stories.
gave a five
I expect next part to have more juice , less hurried and edited , I hope
sorry
Not the greatest at this sorry, and why would i hire anyone to edit this? just sharing my story for horny people who like
re: Poor writing
No, learn basic English. I don't expect professional level writing, but I do expect some evidence the poster (can't really call it a writer) passed grammar school English. None of that exists in this mess with the run-on sentences, shitty punctuation, non-existent sentence structure, phrases that just don't make sense (she put on the porn bulls hammering white trophy wife's just like her.), etc.
Written by another convenience store clerk
Living in his mother's basement.
Get a life! 0*
Virtually unreadable.
This stream of conciousness is so disjointed that you need a ghostwriter, not an editor. You have a basic theme, i.e. You want your wife to go black. Beyond that, you have nothing but a page of pseudo random words completely divorced from coherent thought or sentence structure.
Gordo12
Wow bud that was a really bad insult good thing I don't let angry virgins get me down, i knew guys like you in High school you may be smarter and have better grammar but you're the loser here, go get laid pal it will change your life
I don't care
I was easily one of the worse students in my school besides math of course, dumb jock who's glory days were in HS is what you all think, but owning my own business and being semi wealthy as an adult are the glory days here!!! wait till the next story i am gonna bunch the words up so bad just to watch you spelling bee champs get all angry lol
Anonymous
you guys come on here to jack off to stories of situations you'll never be in so just shut up, unless you are a pro writer i am willing to bet you make zero dollars off of your perfect sentence structure lol
Had me confused
Need to slow down and expand on each sentence instead of running them all together. I like the subject but did not care for the way you presented it. And No, I did not come in here to "jack off" but to enjoy.
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