Your story idea is interesting but your grammar and spelling are atrocious!!! There are people that volunteer their time to edit stories for authors on Lit. Look for one!!!
Seems like this would be good, just need some editing.
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Anonymous01/01/15
Very good start...
Loving this already. Can't wait to see what happens next. Just please submit your chapters more frequently, as there is so many authors on here that don't. Looking forward to chapter 2. :)
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Anonymous01/01/15
waiting for second chapter
It's good. Kind if felt sad that he died already and wonder what lies ahead for Lisa?? Write soon...
An interesting idea, can't wait to read more. Although I would recommend finding an editor for your stories. If you like, send me a message and I'll look them over for you.
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Find someone to edit for you!!!!
Your story idea is interesting but your grammar and spelling are atrocious!!! There are people that volunteer their time to edit stories for authors on Lit. Look for one!!!
Seems like this would be good, just need some editing.
Very good start...
Loving this already. Can't wait to see what happens next. Just please submit your chapters more frequently, as there is so many authors on here that don't. Looking forward to chapter 2. :)
waiting for second chapter
It's good. Kind if felt sad that he died already and wonder what lies ahead for Lisa?? Write soon...
Enjoyed very much
Look forward to part 2. Great suspense, loved the detail took me right into the story.
Fun idea
An interesting idea, can't wait to read more. Although I would recommend finding an editor for your stories. If you like, send me a message and I'll look them over for you.
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