But overall I like it. It's hard to understand her flip flopping back and forth emotionally though. Everytime you think she's about to "fall into it" she runs away. It seems a little unrealistic in that regard.
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Anonymous12/17/14
I am enjoying the story very much. Maybe this is because I am a woman, but I enjoy the verbal interactions between them and the emotional bonding that is going on more than the sexual aspects. I think you have taken a kind of "weirdo relationship" and shown how fragile and complex people can be when they have been traumatized . Keep up the great writing .
Love the cliff hanger. The story is wonderful will Andrew tell his story first?
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Anonymous12/18/14
I get the feeling that she is afraid to lose someone she cares about like she did with her brother who died, and any sort of caring done on her part she is just going to run away instead of face it and learn to love. Andrew wants to love again, so of course there's that conflict. Hope they can help each other out!
it is quite obvious that you are a very accompished writer and the story is quite gripping. Of course, since this site is called Literotica my heading here is not that logical. But I think when the story is as strong as this, too much sex breaks the magic. If you are going down the track of analysing the emotions as much as you do , less frequent sex builds the anticipation making it more enjoyable. But hey, it is your story and I think you are doing a great job on it. Thankyou for sharing it with us. Suspect the anonymous referring to the Mr Rochester connection is on the right track ;)
Contrary to some of your other comments, though I do agree that there is a lot of sex, I actually quite enjoy it (I LOVE IT!!!!!!!). This story revolves around sex so I can see why there's a lot of sex written in it. However, I think it's the snippets of conversations, the secrets revealed and Gina's thought process that makes me come back again and again, hoping against hope that she comes to her senses and realizes that, "hey, it's not all about the sex!" There's room for a relationship here, for BOTH of them, however the only problem that remains is that Andrew is still attached to his still lingering wife (wherever she may be) and fighting his own demons and Gina, well, she's fighting her own demons as well. So, as long as there shall be story AND smut, I shall keep reading! This is a GREAT story! I'll follow your story for as long as you keep writing! Thank you!
Andrew looked down at his plate and moved his food around with his fork. He said softly, "There's no such thing as just sex, Gina, you can't..."
"Says you!" I interrupted. "The rest of the world gets along fine with a simple, emotionless bang now and then. I think it would do you a world of good to go out and get laid by some hot girl you probably won't see again."
His eyes narrowed, "You really think everyone is doing fine with that? You think the women you see every day at the shelter are fine with that?"
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Anonymous12/08/15
Gina is struggling and needs to grow up
It's so obvious to us out here in reader land that Gina is an immature mess. It seems incongruous that Gina can be so eager and willing to have very intimate and loving sex, but unable to sit next to Andrew and hold hands while watching a movie. Certainly very fine writing, though, and an original plot line.
English
Getting there...getting there... I want them to end up woth each other badly
agreed.
I want them to end up together.
A very strange story
But overall I like it. It's hard to understand her flip flopping back and forth emotionally though. Everytime you think she's about to "fall into it" she runs away. It seems a little unrealistic in that regard.
I am enjoying the story very much. Maybe this is because I am a woman, but I enjoy the verbal interactions between them and the emotional bonding that is going on more than the sexual aspects. I think you have taken a kind of "weirdo relationship" and shown how fragile and complex people can be when they have been traumatized . Keep up the great writing .
Love the cliff hanger. The story is wonderful will Andrew tell his story first?
I get the feeling that she is afraid to lose someone she cares about like she did with her brother who died, and any sort of caring done on her part she is just going to run away instead of face it and learn to love. Andrew wants to love again, so of course there's that conflict. Hope they can help each other out!
too much sex
it is quite obvious that you are a very accompished writer and the story is quite gripping. Of course, since this site is called Literotica my heading here is not that logical. But I think when the story is as strong as this, too much sex breaks the magic. If you are going down the track of analysing the emotions as much as you do , less frequent sex builds the anticipation making it more enjoyable. But hey, it is your story and I think you are doing a great job on it. Thankyou for sharing it with us. Suspect the anonymous referring to the Mr Rochester connection is on the right track ;)
Arty Kay
I love the sex!
Contrary to some of your other comments, though I do agree that there is a lot of sex, I actually quite enjoy it (I LOVE IT!!!!!!!). This story revolves around sex so I can see why there's a lot of sex written in it. However, I think it's the snippets of conversations, the secrets revealed and Gina's thought process that makes me come back again and again, hoping against hope that she comes to her senses and realizes that, "hey, it's not all about the sex!" There's room for a relationship here, for BOTH of them, however the only problem that remains is that Andrew is still attached to his still lingering wife (wherever she may be) and fighting his own demons and Gina, well, she's fighting her own demons as well. So, as long as there shall be story AND smut, I shall keep reading! This is a GREAT story! I'll follow your story for as long as you keep writing! Thank you!
Lol theres no such thing as too much sex
The Love scene
Has been the best thing I have read on this site. A talking scene. Well done! Great thoughts; great writing.
Nice visit to the inner Gina
She is a fascinating person who has a strong tendency to shoot herself in the foot.
Andrew is in love....
Not just fine writing -- wise thinking!
Andrew looked down at his plate and moved his food around with his fork. He said softly, "There's no such thing as just sex, Gina, you can't..."
"Says you!" I interrupted. "The rest of the world gets along fine with a simple, emotionless bang now and then. I think it would do you a world of good to go out and get laid by some hot girl you probably won't see again."
His eyes narrowed, "You really think everyone is doing fine with that? You think the women you see every day at the shelter are fine with that?"
Gina is struggling and needs to grow up
It's so obvious to us out here in reader land that Gina is an immature mess. It seems incongruous that Gina can be so eager and willing to have very intimate and loving sex, but unable to sit next to Andrew and hold hands while watching a movie. Certainly very fine writing, though, and an original plot line.
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