That would be nice; thank you for a great start to what promises to be a fine story. Four stars.
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Anonymous12/18/14
A waste of my time to read this scene. Not erotic
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Anonymous12/18/14
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I felt like when it finally started to get erotic and sexy you rushed it. As if you wanted to end your sex scene quickly creating an anticlimactic scenario for the reader. Otherwise you had great foreshadowing and literary devices.
I gave you the full five stars because the story was well written and the content was thrilling. Would have liked to have seen more of the details laid out, but it was still a solid piece of work as it was submitted.
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That would be nice; thank you for a great start to what promises to be a fine story. Four stars.
A waste of my time to read this scene. Not erotic
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I felt like when it finally started to get erotic and sexy you rushed it. As if you wanted to end your sex scene quickly creating an anticlimactic scenario for the reader. Otherwise you had great foreshadowing and literary devices.
5 stars but ....
I gave you the full five stars because the story was well written and the content was thrilling. Would have liked to have seen more of the details laid out, but it was still a solid piece of work as it was submitted.
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