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Wow
Nice job. Every man's dream come true. Can I be invited to your next pool party?
Welcome!
Glad to see you've dipped your toe in the water here at Literotica. Much more to cum I hope.
Welcome to Literotica
Realism makes such a wonderful difference. Thank you.
Good vignette
And believable, too, after a fashion. The first sentence starts with a glaring grammar error which was off putting. But overall, a nice first effort.
Thanks for the encouragement
And I have just spotted the grammar problem in the 1st para - How the hell did I miss that!
Grammar!!
Please, you start out with "Me and my wife" which should be, "My wife and I". I haven't read further. you need an editor and advisor. Please find one and do a rewrite. Then I might pursue an interesting concept.
KEEP GOING
Very hot, continue on.
Good story
Don't listen to the haters, big deal your grammar isn't perfect. Its a sex story not a thesis. I enjoyed it.
Enjoyable!
I enjoyed it, and as a non-english person, the grammar didn't bother me at al ;)
A nice 'dream'!
We both very much enjoyed this story and congratulate you on a good first effort. We've had some similar fun in our hot tub over the years and this story brought back memories. We wish we'd been there in the steamy bubbles with the three of you! Please post some more stories here.
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