Take me take me thanks for this great read
Awesome debut, Kyriae! Don't stop now. Keep 'em coming. Maybe part deux? -Micahael
Part 2 is in the works and im going to try to get it finished and uploaded by end of the week
U did good
And here comes the "but", your grammar needs some work. Nothing serious enough to distract me, or prevent me from finishing the story. The inconsistent verb tense is mildly irritating. Find a good editor for the next one.
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just fantastic
Take me take me thanks for this great read
You got game!
Awesome debut, Kyriae! Don't stop now. Keep 'em coming. Maybe part deux?
-Micahael
Michael
Part 2 is in the works and im going to try to get it finished and uploaded by end of the week
Really good
U did good
Story is hot and good for stroke session.
And here comes the "but", your grammar needs some work. Nothing serious enough to distract me, or prevent me from finishing the story. The inconsistent verb tense is mildly irritating. Find a good editor for the next one.
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