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Well...
unless someone hacked the account it was written by DGHear but the quality is sadly missing!
Having read part 1, i was in 2 minds as to whether to bother with part 2, as you can tell by my comment being here i read it but needn't have bothered. I've never known a DG story so lacking in .... well pretty much everything that used to make him appear to be such a talented writer!
Usually there is a character that draws you in and makes you feel for at least one of them but i just felt lacklustre/ apathetic to them all!
Sorry DG but you can be so much better than this offering :(
DG Hear
As promised submitted ch. 2 as soon as possible thanks to my editor. As I have said, not ever story is for everyone. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my stories. It's always appreciated. Maybe I'm getting to old for this.
with respect
DG
Nope
The set up was there in ch 1. This one sounded like it gave into those wanting Charles to be a cheat.
WHICH SISTER GETS THE TONY
while the other has an Oscar. TK U MLJ LV NV
As in part 1...
As in part 1, this was about cheaters. She being the smart lawyer she was, why the need to stay in a marriage like the one she had? She was so smart that her old office were sorry not to keep her and not her husband. A so clever woman never would stay married to a guy that cheated on her. That's where the story spoils itself...And a clever woman, would never choose to become a whore, like the sister. She would have divorced and live her life, trying to find a new love. Sorry @DG Hear, but you weren't inspired writing this...
Trashy story.
Story of cheaters. Enjoyed only by those who can not attract and keep their own mate.
Of course it was about cheaters
That's what this category is all about deep down, isn't it? Nice story DG!
nice story
Done very well. Enjoyable. Not too long, not too short. I'd say, "just right."
Ultimately a nice Fuzzy, Feel Good story
Even if it was about cheaters, the Good Gal won in the end.
Haters gonna hate
Ignore the two hating anonymous reviews. Good story, well written. Most enjoyable.
Just like a woman's skirt ought to be... long enough to cover the subject, short enough to keep things interesting.
Just not up to your usual standards
Maybe next time.
Smothest Cheater story I have encountered
The only personage that I liked was the baby girl!
So who's the real cheater here? Charles is a two faced bag of shit
She finally got a life and got rid of the controll freak husband who was the real cheater.just used her for his show! Good ending , I had doubts about chapter one but you ended it beautifully.
Those men who hate women critics, can't see past their blinders!
Sorry for you who only see life in one dimension . You can honest say she was not a victim and did not deseve a life from this two faced creep named Charles. Are you so blind sided with you perverted comments and so procedure in your thinking process. sad !
Great
My wife & I truly loved this story. We had some wild sex after reading the first half. She even fantasized about Kevin fucking her. I hope you write more stories along this line.
should we call this a cliche
or just an accurate depiction of life. The main characters were lawyers and all were despicable.
Who are you??
Are you really DG Hear? I've read your other stories and this was not even within lightyears of the others.
From Duna
Do not do double standard. The husband was serial cheater................
A new low for DG
What happened to you?
Charles Was Never Real
You set him up as the straw man in chapter one and just beat him to death in the finish. This allowed the amoral protagonist to look good by comparison. Unappealing, least of evil characters make for a bleak story. But five stars anyway for stretching yourself. One little technical note: you consistently use "to" when "too" is the correct usage. Just sayin.
Nice tale
Well done kittle tale. Enjoyable, thanks for posting
Enjoyed
A fun little read. Thanks for doing it
Nothing good about this.
Two people who weren't in love. They should have never married. She should have divorced before whoring herself out like that. Even though the husband was a douche bag, she could have walked anytime. But that's just me. I'm more of a murder before cheat kind of person anyway.
Thanks for the effort. It's where you end up that counts.
She ended up OK, so that's good. Charles was such an ass she deserved what she got for marrying him. Would probably still be married to him if not for the pregnancy, so what's that make her? Not a bad person, just a lazy person. Her child gave her some gumption. I hope she finds a worthy man to provide a father for her child. If she's fucking Ben behind his wife's back then she is still too lazy to find a decent available man. At least she lacks the imagination and marital ambition to appreciate what she's missing. Let's hope she finds true love and happiness, someday.
***
I'm a word nit picker like SparksWillFly, so I'll pass on this story. Good writing. Didn't much care for her pick of sex partners - especially her own husband. Story was just okay. Cheers!
A departure
I really found this story lacking... unusual for you.
It was a 'I did this and then I did this' kind of story--factual but devoid of anything substantive or emotive. And that's the real shame of it because the bones of this story are great, but that's all they are... bones.
OK I guess
She had an unhappy marriage, she fucked some other guys, she had a baby, she got divorced and now she's happy enough. That about sum it up?
Well
Normally I enjoy your stories but this is not one of your best in my view, looking forward to you getting back to your usual standards.
Women are all BITCHES
KILL THEM ALL !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Potential. ...
Ok story which had all yhe ingredients to be a great story.
The ending seemed to be rushed !
Perhaps a sequel in the future.
Meh
she was a slut. Should have got the divorce and then moved on.
Good one
I liked this story- it could have had several more chapters that filled in some gaps; I was expecting Kevin to play a bigger role and there to be some more backlash at the husband, but sometimes a few red herrings are just fine. Keep up the nice work and I look forward to your future stories.
to rushed, to sappy
its all smelling like roses and sliding right into heaven. She makes close friends with Ben, the same guy that was a whorehound, and ran with her husband. She really makes excellent choices in the men she selects to fuck. Oh yes, she is a brilliant tax attorney but a stupid dumb fuck and her low class fuck around sister is the one that woke her up to life..
wife
I can't understand the criticism of her as her husband was fooling around and their marriage was merrily one of convenience
Sad
Just sad. She says that she's not a cum slut, but believe me, she is.
Poor showing
Not a single person to like in this tale. They're all dumb as bricks and seem to be incapable of making rational decisions. Not to mention that they're all so boring that the "drama" has no impact whatsoever.
2 stars from me. Not nearly up to par with your other works.
SparksWillFly is right about Charles...
He is a strawman. His development is poor even for crappy LW setups. As for the rest, who cares that she has fucks multiple partners? Christ, you'd think LW was a nunnery the way you cucks go on about women.
The big problem with this story is the magical pot that makes every backyard bbq into an orgy. It's incredibly annoying when people write about what they don't understand and can't be bothered to research (as in 10 mins on google).
Yuk....
She was a stupid cum slut and married to an asshole man whore.
Her sister was a pig and every man in this story sucked shit as well.
The only person I have sympathy for in this story is the poor kid.
Hope her mother and everyone associated with her dies from being amoral, out of control fuckwads and she gets adopted by something more closely resembling humans.
What a bunch of goddamned lizards!!!
Cock slut
And she says that she's not a whore? I beg to differ. When the baby isn't bi-racial so it could be either one of 2 guys, that sounds like a whole in my book.
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