Home Comes the Hero

What A Waste*

Of my time.

a non story.

Don't give up your day job.

sick

stories of the mentally ill aren't erotic

Stupid

What's happened with LW, 99,99% stories, it is wimp, cuck stories

1*

WTF

Did I just miss something ? where was the story ?

finishing the dam story...

.... Months passed by and Edith again cuckold Harold. He got more angry at her. He decided on the perfect plan. He wasn't going special forces on her. His plan was simple. He left her and the Bastard child and lived a perfect life. He began making money on the booming stock market. Married a woman name Lisa who is a divorcée from a cheater. Their love thrived with endless nights of love making and many children to prove it.
One day Harold was walking with his family on a gorgeous day. They passed a small alley. Harold glimpsed in and locked eyes on well used woman laying on her back as her john was fucking her. Tears from her eyes wet her cheek.,. On the other hand Harold stopped and whisper to his wife and both chuckle as they watch the spectacle. He walked in 10 feet into the rodent infested garbage filled alley and drop a crisp benjamin, walked back to his family and continue his revenge by living a wonderful life. OH WHAT EVER HAPPEN TO EDITH? WHO GIVES A FUCK .

Didn't enjoy this story

I will not add a score as it is unfair because of my distest for the plot line and husband

That WHite Hubby must suck Big Black Cock for his wife

A good WHite Husband must provide Big Black Cock for his wife and he must suck it, get it hard, put it in her and lick and suck her clit and holes as she gets black-fucked. That's such a good White Boy!!! If White Wife is feeling lazy but her Superior Black Lover needs action, WHite Hubby must dress in drag and take care of business. This means Wife must train him to suck and ride BBC like a pro. She can whip and kick him till he gets it right, dont cut him too much slack, WHite Boys can start acting silly if you do that!

For future reference, Edsoames, a story should have some sort of plot and purpose. This story has neither. Being in a generous mood, I gave this story a "one" star.

i know of this type of homecoming

NOT pretty... Husband has been major messed up since desert storm... kicked wife out... she has been married numerous times since

God That was Bad

Not worth the 1* .Thats too many..Absolute non erotic drivel.Author, even in fiction or fantasy there has to be an ounce of plausibility or the story does not work.This is one of those Better served in Sci Fi or Fetish

Surprised Literotica is letting ISIS post stories on its site

A real bad story...And one of the saddest ever...

A real bad story...And one of the saddest ever...The writer have the right to write it, but at least should have waited till after the new year to publish it...This is a story for a category that should be called: "The dark side of the soul", not for LW. MERRY CHRISTMAS TO ALL THE WRITERS AND READERS OF LW!!!

go to a doctor

you need help.
what do you do in the same situation?
divorce the whore. loyalty its the word.

gave it a 5

merry chirstmas

You have got to be provoking us

That was not an enjoyable, erotic or interesting story!

gave it a 1

This just confirms what I've known for some time. The loving wives category has turned into a sewer trash infested category. No wonder, the better erotica writers don't post much on here anymore. Almost all new writers, write trash for the wimps and cunts that give stories like this five stars. We all know who they are. They're actually proud of themselves. Figure that.

Is this a true story?

It happened a lot in WW2. It was said back then that the Yanks were over paid, over sexed and over here. However this tale is so sparse it barely rates as more than a bar room yarn. Try again.

Garbage

1* cause it reduces your average score.

1 star

He should of killed them all. A good whore is a dead where.

fuck you.

Go away, you would have to be pretty sick to think this is erotic.

A little too close to home.

You do know, of course, that the only reason there is place for you to post this putrid stuff is because some guy, statisically white, BTW, put his life out there during a stream of wars to protect your right to write and post.

You should be dropped in the middle of ISiS territory with a big sign tattooed on your back that says "I am homosexual" and see how long you last.

Funny competition

Are there authors who are in competition to reach the lowest average points?
I help ypu to reach your dream.............

Worst shit I ever read

Please go away and stop writing

I only wish you wouldn't disgrace a man serving his country with this demeaning , humiliating, wimpy story line. No man would allow this she would have been kicked out with her fatherless black baby, it was his house after all . Than she could fuck all the guys she wanted. The men I'm sure were spreading the word about the pig who will fuck anyone.

wow..this sucked

Not just the normal suck but a suck that is hall of fame worthy. Please take up painting because writing isn't your cup of tea.

this was total crap.

He should have kicked the cheating slut out.

Just sad, and sick.

Wife is a slut, husband is a eunuch. Author is mentally disturbed.

Too Short, Needs More Character development

This story had potential but has very little character development. More detail and story telling was needed about Editth cuckolding Harold after they agreed to stay together.
Who were her lovers? Did Edith have another dark complected baby? Did Harold enjoy watching? How do his parents feel about him being a cuckold? Did Edith ever have more than one lover at the same time? Unless there is a well written sequel. The world will never know.

the world doesn't fucking want to know

I could care less what happens to characters written by a sick mind-1*

ok you had your fun

now do us all a big favor. And stop writing stories. Find another hobby.

Does anyone here have any idea.....

....how many women cheated on their husbands during wartime?
Yes, the story sucks. Like most cucky stories, the protagonist is a small-dicked, inadequate, incapable lover and a weakling. The oxymoron is that he went to war and survived, only to come home to find his wife a whore. The weak link for me is the protagonist isn't worth our time. He doesn't represent anybody I can relate to, so I lose interest and compassion for him and his plight.
I think wartime infidelity happens a lot. While there are tons of marriages after a protracted war, there is a significant spike in divorces. That suggests more than the several war-related syndromes at work.

Ah, well. It was a tough topic, not particularly well handled, nor were the characters interesting enough to engage me. Try again, but try something a little more consequential and try to make the characters as real, as normal as you can....within the confines of your story. But stop with the 3" limp-dicked fast shooter wimp crap...It just ruins a potentially good story.

Obviously the author has a brain aneurysm.

Author, you're so stupid you likely try to recycle toilet paper by washing it in the clothes washer.

Have another go

The comments here are a bit neg (!) but imho this is because it's not really a story; it's the introduction to the story. Drop the last line and tuck in to the main course - what happened as a result, how did they cope, etc etc. One page is never enough for a proper tale, I was surprised when it suddenly finished before it really got started.

dear author

please find a bus and throw yourself under it.

thank you.

WTF edsoames.

What are you; five years old?? One star because I can't give it less.

Story needs more thinking

You should describe better the story, for example how he got caught, how he was released, what happened to him, and so.

Also you should take time to describe the characters, to get a better idea.

Although the story's end is crap (you painted a spineless protagonist, no self respecting man would stay with the cheater and her bastard son), it should include his reasons (or his obligations).

Wrapping up, this story should be rewritten (half page "story" won't do).

As it is ... 1 *

p.o.s.

To the writer. ...... FUCK YOU !