Business Trip Pt. 01

Have I seen this before ?

Really like this story and look forward to further chapters, however It seems to me that I have read it before, is this a re-write ?

Are you kidding me?

Have I seen this before, the man asks. Only about five thousand times.

A good beginning...

This is a good and promising beginning...I just hope in the next parts the story is ruined...MERRY CHRISTMAS TO ALL WRITERS AND READERS OF LW.

Not bad but a little too much backstory.

The backstory went on a little too long for my liking.
The whole thing with the bathing suit could have been it's own story.
Still, looking forward to chapter 2

Not every story is for sexual minority

@ Anon you are wrong Cpete's sexual majority behavioral husband story is above 4.5.............

"a few real strong organism"??

Pardon??

Sorry, but this was both pedestrian and glacial.

If this is a first time . . .

. . . keep trying, your writing needs to get more fluid. There is nothing wrong with the tale, per se, but it is only three or four paragraphs of well told content. The rest is fluff; just extra words. So far there is no point to your 'story'.