I enjoyed the way you jumped right into the session and exposed her feelings and attitude as events progressed. Some grammar glitches - you could benefit from an editor - but otherwise good writing. I hope you post more.
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I enjoyed the way you jumped right into the session and exposed her feelings and attitude as events progressed. Some grammar glitches - you could benefit from an editor - but otherwise good writing. I hope you post more.
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