Julie's Wedding

Sick'o

You need professional help before you do something like this again.

Hmm...

I love the concept, but you never developed the part of the story as to why Julie would want to fuck the narrator. You didn't get into it at all. You write a nice sex scene (not hard to do), but a poor story (so common on this site).

2 stars, because you write well. But just a little bit of focus on character development, psychology, motivation, and perhaps why Julie would fuck another man instead of Mark (when they are getting married!) could have made this an awesome story.

Julie had to look around to see who she was fucking. To do otherwise would have been unrealistic.

Good story

Do the other commenters realise that the guy lifted Mark's phone and messaged from that? She didn't know it wasn't the groom. Although I would imagine she may have realised when they started having sex...

A decent short story. Though I imagine Julie would have mentioned it to Mark if she believed it to be him :-P

Implausible garbage

Of course she knew it wasn't her soon to be husband. You don't think a woman would know the man she's been sleeping with? Stupidity runs amok. And you don't think the Groom wouldn't recognize or smell the just fucked look of the woman walking up the aisle? There was no five year anniversary because there was no wedding. The groom called it off and it didn't take long to figure out what happened and who did it. Was a quick fuck worth losing your best friend? Because that's what happened. Ridiculous story. No stars.

Thanks for the comments...

KJane said: "Julie had to look around to see who she was fucking. To do otherwise would have been unrealistic." - You're probably right. But every good fiction story has at least one point where suspension of disbelief is necessary... your objection was the one spot where suspension of disbelief was needed in this story. One of the anonymous posters made similar (though more detailed) comments.

One anonymous commenter called me a sick'o: "You need professional help before you do something like this again." - You DO understand the concept of "fiction", right? And that the events of a fiction story didn't really happen?

Another anonymous commenter seemed to have missed the major thrust of the story. He/she said: "I love the concept, but you never developed the part of the story as to why Julie would want to fuck the narrator." - She didn't, and she wouldn't have... knowingly. But read the story again, and you'll find that the narrator clearly stole Mark's phone, and she thought he was the groom. Then there's the "Its bad luck for us to see each other before the wedding", which is also clearly only applicable between the bride and groom before the wedding. That's why this story is in the non-consent section... she didn't know it wasn't Mark, the groom.

For those of you who read and enjoyed the story, glad you liked it.

great

great writing and a super fantasy. Thank you,

She should have said something about him being so much smaller than the groom.

Beautiful

Just what I like to read in a cuckold story. Great work!

Great Story

This isn't a documentary! It's a fantasy story like all the others.

Great story, really enjoyed it!