Could have used a little more description of the sex acts on the nude beach but I must admit you came up with a pretty good ending. Thanks for a great series. Feel free to come up with something to top this. Got to admit that could be hard to do.
I thoroughly enjoyed all 11 chapters of this story. Terrific reading. Maybe you could do your fans one more favor, and resubmit the story as one long one, with all 11 chapters. (If not, anyone can still re-read by following the links. /wink) Of course, you did a great job wrapping up this story, but you left an opening for a follow-on: If he met Janet in an incest chatroom, perhaps you could begin a new story detailing HER family's exploits.
And perhaps those two separate storylines could eventually merge for a "Families' Fortunes"?
Whether you head in that general direction or bring us an entirely new story next, I look forward to your writing. Five Stars.
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Anonymous01/12/15
Very nice indeed!
Very nice indeed!
BUT
Long stories are good for those writers who do not have many great story ideas.
That is not the case with niemand1994 who has created many innovative and new story concepts.
So hopefully we can get another story now, this time just with the Mother and the Son without all of the other distractions.
My thanks to niemand1994 for great stories.
He is rapidly getting to be one of the best on the Lit.
Contrary for below, long stories are not for thosew with no ideas. Just the opposite. Some of the best writers ever on this site: Tx Tall Tales, Mentalcase22, Silkstockingslover, and VertigoJ, all write long stories. Short stories are known as stroke stories, as in a quick stroke off. Having said that, niemand1994 has shown he can write longer stories. I felt chapter 11 of this was rather anticlimactic. He had taken the time to build up secret liasons between various members, that the other knew nothing about, with only the brother being privy to it all. Then after all that worked, it seems like he just got bored and said "And they all fucked happily ever after." Great story, just wished he'd wrapped it up differently. Seems like he mailed it in. I do see lots of possibilities for future variations, starting with Janet. So I really hope to see more writings from niemand1994 on this and other stories in the future. Keep writing.
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Anonymous01/13/15
great 11 chapters
what great set of storys it ended good and hot
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Anonymous01/13/15
Epilogue or something more.
Hoping that there is at least 1-2 more. I want Janet to be more than glossed over not really present character.
What a great series. I hope it isn't over though. You left the opening for Janice, please fill it. This chapter actually brought a couple of tears as the family realized all their secrets. Although it was almost a bit of a run for the border at the end. But I think you have more in mind or the mention of the incest site wouldn't have come up. More, please!
English
Great wrap up
Could have used a little more description of the sex acts on the nude beach but I must admit you came up with a pretty good ending. Thanks for a great series. Feel free to come up with something to top this. Got to admit that could be hard to do.
Best regards; max052
If this is the end, nicely done.
I thoroughly enjoyed all 11 chapters of this story. Terrific reading. Maybe you could do your fans one more favor, and resubmit the story as one long one, with all 11 chapters. (If not, anyone can still re-read by following the links. /wink) Of course, you did a great job wrapping up this story, but you left an opening for a follow-on: If he met Janet in an incest chatroom, perhaps you could begin a new story detailing HER family's exploits.
And perhaps those two separate storylines could eventually merge for a "Families' Fortunes"?
Whether you head in that general direction or bring us an entirely new story next, I look forward to your writing. Five Stars.
Very nice indeed!
Very nice indeed!
BUT
Long stories are good for those writers who do not have many great story ideas.
That is not the case with niemand1994 who has created many innovative and new story concepts.
So hopefully we can get another story now, this time just with the Mother and the Son without all of the other distractions.
My thanks to niemand1994 for great stories.
He is rapidly getting to be one of the best on the Lit.
Not quite
Contrary for below, long stories are not for thosew with no ideas. Just the opposite. Some of the best writers ever on this site: Tx Tall Tales, Mentalcase22, Silkstockingslover, and VertigoJ, all write long stories. Short stories are known as stroke stories, as in a quick stroke off. Having said that, niemand1994 has shown he can write longer stories. I felt chapter 11 of this was rather anticlimactic. He had taken the time to build up secret liasons between various members, that the other knew nothing about, with only the brother being privy to it all. Then after all that worked, it seems like he just got bored and said "And they all fucked happily ever after." Great story, just wished he'd wrapped it up differently. Seems like he mailed it in. I do see lots of possibilities for future variations, starting with Janet. So I really hope to see more writings from niemand1994 on this and other stories in the future. Keep writing.
great 11 chapters
what great set of storys it ended good and hot
Epilogue or something more.
Hoping that there is at least 1-2 more. I want Janet to be more than glossed over not really present character.
Excellent series, so hot...
What a great series. I hope it isn't over though. You left the opening for Janice, please fill it. This chapter actually brought a couple of tears as the family realized all their secrets. Although it was almost a bit of a run for the border at the end. But I think you have more in mind or the mention of the incest site wouldn't have come up. More, please!
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