Baking For My Son

Nothing controversial about this.

Good story

One little typo bowel/bowl. Other than that it moved well. You should continue this story.

who doesnt love raw batter?

great story. very erotic. well written, except for the one "bowel" instead of "bowl". liked it very much. 5 stars.

What wonderful pictures you paint

Since I struggle with painting pictures with words I appreciate your use of them in creating pictures. Does it work for muffins too?

Wow! Five star experience

Well written and now, I feel so horny. :)

Controversial?

More like Fantasy

spontanious

I don't usually enjoy stories with out character building. This story captures the moment and let's the reader imagine what thoughts or events may have transpired long before the batter was mixed. It flowed nicely even lending the thought that this could of possibly happened. Fantasy and plausibility are wove together leaving one wanting to know more.

well done

I think is was a well written story. Fun, a good fantasy play. Excellent descriptions of setting. One suggestion is to watch comma placements as they can change the meaning and flow of sentences.

very good be interesting what happens next

Good job

Many write a one page story but very few pull it off. Good job! *****

There's nothing controversial about this.

Unfortunate editing problem

"I look down into the bowel" .... considering when that phrase was and how early on...I couldn't quite get the image out of my head after.

good story

liked it a lot, write more soon

Excellent

It can be difficult to write a one-page story that moves quickly while remaining believable and having interesting characters. You pulled it off extremely well! It was so hot to hear her conflicted thoughts as a single moment of sexual tension snowballed into being unexpectedly taken by her strong son. I hope you write more scenes in the life of these two.

Only good

For a quick jerk-off story, there was no real story there, he ripped her shirt open pulled down her bra sucked her tits then turned her around and fucked her.

I like it.

That was well written I quite like it myself. :) I'd log in to write this on my CtMurphy account but I dun wanna lose track of the story in order to do it. Thankyou for the read :)

good job

for a first you did well...ty

thats a keeper

wow this is a hot story I like! more please

Damn good for your first foray into incest. I usually like the longer stories but you captured quite a lot of passion in such a short amount of writing. Helped that you had a good bit of detailed description. My only gripe is at the start of your 5th paragraph, you have "I look down into the bowel". Bowel instead of bowl. I initially didn't see it, but when I got distracted and was re-reading to find where I left off, I stumbled upon it. I realize it was a minor error- mistakes do happen- it just produced a funny image in my head.

A good start

It seems that he can dominate his mom, and I'd like to read more of his control over his new lover.

Thanks for the read

To damn sexy

had my attn from the start, sexy and lustful. this needs to continue

Liked It

This is a fun, saucy read. Short but erotic, although I didn't really feel like I got to know the characters much. Knowing their back story and why they suddenly are willing to cross taboo barriers are a big part of why a story generates heat for me.

Way to write

Thank you, very well writen. Love the build up, and you did a great job of painting the scene.

I love this boy's aggressiveness

It's only natural, of course. After all, he's the one with the cock. And this kid sure knows where that hard young cock of his belongs. Right up the same warm wet cunt he came out of. Lots and lots of sons spend years dreaming about their own mother's vagina. They're obsessed, they whack off picturing it, imagining they're penetrating it with their own penis. As they splatter their semen all over their chest and stomach, they whisper "mom!" and even "mommy!" But this boy knows that jerking off is for 13 year olds. So he just shoves his powerful prick up that hairy hole between his mother's legs like he owns it--and from now on he sure as fuck does own it. Mom's heart melts as her cunt runs like a river. She loves her boy being in charge, in total control, and for him that's just second nature. His manly arrogance overwhelms her mind, as he pummels and pounds his own mother's twat. The boy ends up blowing his young balls up inside his mother, marking that twat as his territory with his huge dose of semen. Win-win for them both.

Nicely worded.

VERY sensual and evocative and involving.

now, THAT was hot!

Thanks JGB; nicely done.

Well done

I haven't read any of your other works as yet, but I will certainly be reading them now.
This story is very well written and is very vivid and clearly depicted... I want to walk into the kitchen while you are baking.

I look forward to more of your writings.

Wasn't crazy about the story nor the threat by the author at the beginning. Personally I like stories that have a lot of external talking back and forth, especially if it's dirty talking. This story had a lot of internal narrative but only four sentences said out loud. In regards to the fetish, was the fetish a food fetish with cake batter or a domination fetish as that's essentially what the son did. I didn't see anything in the story that indicated that the mother wanted to be fucked at the beginning. She was not dressed provokingly nor did she say anything that said "Take me here and now!". In fact she never said anything at all. He just decided that he wanted to fuck her and luckily for him, she ended up wanting him too. This very easily could have played out into a rape scenario.
This commentary is not an attack on your character. It's just my opinion. If you wish to delete it, so be it.

Great story.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

5 stars

Great story very well written. Just enough detail for me

Good read

Good read, let's have more of these.

Very erotic!!!!

Very visual and expressive. I like to watch the story play out virtually in my mind, as if I were watching a DVD, hearing the sounds, smelling the odors.
One thing though. "Pining" is when you are fervently wishing for something to happen. In this story, as he was holding his mom's hands, it should be "pinning." I still give it 5 stars on the erection meter.