Aunt Kate

Not bad

Nice little start, now please continue.

You desperately need an editor

But please continue.
This is going to be a hot story.
You can't let it go.
Just get an editor, because this deserves to be told.

Can't wait...

Can't wait for the next installment!

great start for AK

looking forward to more keep on trucking love it so far tenbears43

Great story...

There were grammar errors - sure, but I was able to enjoy the story in spite of them.

Keep it up, please ... waiting for part II.

Good story concept but clean it up

I like where you are going with the story and I will wait on part two but good writing requires a good story line AND clean editing.

I want it to be better.

It's a great start. Nice plot line, good setup for future stories. Now, PLEASE get an editor. It reads like it was written by a 15 year old.

Ruthless

Man, you fuckers are ruthless

Just a few more paragraphs...

And you'd have had me shooting ropes.

Good 1st story, but you do need an editor.

Good One!

Yes you need or can use an editor, but I read these storys for the fucking, I don't care about grammar, syntax, or spelling. I came to read this when you suggested it, before I read #2. So now I'm off to read #2. Liked this one, hope #2 is as good.

Thanks***

For the read.

Good story

It's a very good story. But the grammar and punctuation errors & omissions made it a difficult read...ultimately taking a lot away from what would have otherwise gotten 5 stars from me.

Great start! Pleeeease, find yourself an editor for future submissions, or least take a few minutes to proof read. You have a nice premise going.

some pretty strange family dynamics

It could go just about anywhere from here. We know so little about these people I am not even sure how we got where we are now.

Learn to use commas.

Interesting story but try using commas. Way too many run on sentences and change of tense in this story.