Totally lacking credibility, rather silly dialogue and, no father refers to himself as "Daddy" when talking to an 18 + year old daughter.
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Anonymous01/06/15
As if !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Waste of my time just your unlikely fantasy.
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Anonymous01/06/15
unreal 2
In these incest stories, just about every mother who is fucking her son calls herself 'mommy'. So do the sons. In fact some insist on it. Some really get into 'baby talk', for example : ' Does mommies baby boy want his naughty mommy to suck his great big cock?' I agree with the rest of your comments, though.
I like your series. As far as unrealistic, it is but that is why it is fantasy. I do see that as you write there is improvement. As far as the negative comments. A great many people do not think how much it takes for people to let their dark side out. Keep writing. Thank you.
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Anonymous01/06/15
Please Stop
"I was starting to make small whimpering noises into my step mom's pussy and could feel an orgasm building in my own. It had me so distracted that I was a little surprised when she came. Her clit swelled in my mouth and I felt her pussy start spasming against my chin as she pressed her feet to the mattress and ground her hips against my face, Daddy keeping me still for her."
That's about as erotic as dying my hair. Could you be any less bored and distanced? You sound completely dead inside. No emotion, just disengaged description. Charming.
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Anonymous01/07/15
Chapters Need to be Numbered
Readers should not have to figure out the order of the 6 chapters.
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Anonymous01/11/15
More!!!
Less with daddy and mummy.. More with the brothers please?? Maybe make one of the brothers feel a little sorrow for her but fucks her anyway..
English
Unreal
Totally lacking credibility, rather silly dialogue and, no father refers to himself as "Daddy" when talking to an 18 + year old daughter.
As if !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Waste of my time just your unlikely fantasy.
unreal 2
In these incest stories, just about every mother who is fucking her son calls herself 'mommy'. So do the sons. In fact some insist on it. Some really get into 'baby talk', for example : ' Does mommies baby boy want his naughty mommy to suck his great big cock?' I agree with the rest of your comments, though.
good
I like your series. As far as unrealistic, it is but that is why it is fantasy. I do see that as you write there is improvement. As far as the negative comments. A great many people do not think how much it takes for people to let their dark side out. Keep writing. Thank you.
Please Stop
"I was starting to make small whimpering noises into my step mom's pussy and could feel an orgasm building in my own. It had me so distracted that I was a little surprised when she came. Her clit swelled in my mouth and I felt her pussy start spasming against my chin as she pressed her feet to the mattress and ground her hips against my face, Daddy keeping me still for her."
That's about as erotic as dying my hair. Could you be any less bored and distanced? You sound completely dead inside. No emotion, just disengaged description. Charming.
Chapters Need to be Numbered
Readers should not have to figure out the order of the 6 chapters.
More!!!
Less with daddy and mummy.. More with the brothers please?? Maybe make one of the brothers feel a little sorrow for her but fucks her anyway..
Improve
Improve your story-add detail
More! please more.
This is tooo goood for my pussy.
More please!
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