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Beginning and Ending
Good Morning NJ
It seems that there was a beginning that we should know of. How did she arrive at this point.
The ending left us with submission of the female on the table. Which is okay because we can all imagine what MAY have happened next.
The writing was good but, you need more content.
I agree
how did they come to that situation? but i like the story
Tantalizing!
I disagree with the other two comments - this is a slice of experience that is best savored out-of-context, best enjoyed independent of history. It really doesn't matter how they got to this - just that they are here, although to be left hanging at the precipice of my silken wetly glistening heat was damned unnerving...
Erin
Sexy and enjoyable
I too disagree with the negatives. The story needs no preamble. It's sexy, good tension, and gets the juices flowing. Just what a good short story should do. Perhaps the other commentards have no imagination...
More
More, please.
No context needed or wanted
Whoo - that was hot!
Wow!
That was great I love the way it leaves you hanging at the end. Great work.😃
Powerful
My mouth was dry and my body simply tingled! But having said that, I should love to see a sequel! Loved it!
I'm intrigued by the title
Is there something about the title we should be figuring out?
Fine Control
You're really good at extending detail, pace, development -- as I've commented (anonymously) on your other 2 submissions. I see you exercising mature, literate craft with the kind of elegant control you give to some of your characters.
Spare and erotic
Clever, spare and erotic writing---most enjoyable. Nothing more needed, nothing more to be said.
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