a brief sketch, in outline form.
She didn't pay attention in class, there was a test later, and she failed.
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Anonymous01/06/15
poor ending
I was with you there until the ending. Too much like a 50s hygeine film. This can happen to you! Thanks for the scare tactics. They worked decades ago.
This site is about erotic fantasy. To me that means stories that don't let the real world intrude. In the fantasy world of this site, everyone is always ready and available for sex, and all encounters ultimately end with amazing orgasms. Kids, jobs, paying bills, grocery shopping - none of that real world stuff gets in the way. There are no consequences - unwanted pregnancy, disease, broken marriages, damaged reputations - and of course there's no need for birth control. That's all part of the fun and fantasy (I believe that Nancy Friday, while analyzing sexual fantasies herself, acknowledged that the ultimate goal of erotic fantasy was sexual excitement).
I read the story with mild interest. It was not as erotic as others I've read, and the arguing between the couple over the idea of her having another man just seemed to be getting in the way of the action. I stuck with it as I wanted to see where it was going. I wondered if the woman would be proven right, that her husband really was turned on by the idea and that it would either end in a threesome or with them having amazing sex (typical plot paths for the "wife wants to try another man" storyline). I didn't find the ending to be at all erotic or exciting. Instead it was just sad and depressing. Maybe I'm old fashioned; I want my erotica to have a happy ending!
I spent several minutes reading many of the other comments and mulling over how I felt about the story, and why. I even picked another of your stories ("Immaculate Conception") and read it, just to see how something else you had written compared to this story. I noticed that both stories had negative consequences for the person (a woman, in both cases) who cheated. Are all of your stories morality tales that focus on cheating women, and the consequences they must deal with? If so, we obviously have different ideas of what constitutes erotica.
This is actually the first time I've commented on any story on this site, although I've been here many times and read many stories. I think the volume of comments and the extreme reactions led me to want to throw in my own two cents.
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Anonymous01/06/15
Tired, boring, cliche, God's revenge. Yawn
Why not have Satan himself jump up and brand her with an everlasting firey "A" on her chest? That's just as realistic as her not treating syphilis and dying with dementia in a year.
How can they be well matched but can't talk about sex? If one party says their sex life needs spicing up, it does. If the other party doesn't think so it just means he's satisfied and she's not. The "satisfied" partner needs to do something to keep the other in the fold if he loves her instead of just an image of her. It can be done or it's at least worth trying. Just shutting her down without coming up with alternatives is a recipe for disaster. The unsatisfied partner will cheat or leave. The unsatisfied partner, after trying to improve things in the marriage, should ask for joint counseling. If that fails or is refused, of course she should seek a divorce instead of cheating.
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Anonymous01/06/15
Easy to write into that direction
I agree that storyline is much better to show the betrayed husbands find better woman instead of the cheating ex wives, but the authors must build more energy to write the stories into that direction. With a quick twist to close a story is easy.
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Anonymous01/06/15
wow
i get the feeling the writer of this has been cheated on in the past, to have her die is kinda fucked up man, if you dont like cheating that is fair enough but it is supposed to be an erotic story. what the fuck?
Will not criticize you for venting because, at least, you wrote a story to do it. Good on you. You were in such a hurry to get to revenge you ignored medical facts about the progress of that disease. Sounded more like aids in its timing of symptoms but like syphilis in the actual body symptoms. Overall a weak effort for readers but hoped it helped your emotional state
Someone said this might reflect something personal, but this wasn't your first tale. I think Iron Dragon said it was more outline than story. I think he's right. We all get an idea, get excited, and pour it out without thinking. D.Q. Steele's "When We Were Married" was the closest to what I thought was a personal experience, especially the beginning. If you haven't, you should read that. In fact you should read all of DQS's stuff before you write another word. Just my opinion mind you.
she got what she deserved, too bad it didn't last longer. now half of the rest of his life he wont trust a woman, while although it's a good rule of thumb, if everyone did we wouldn't have the population we do now.
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Anonymous01/26/15
I Don't Get It
Why all the negative comment about this story? Yes it would be nice to get the storyline more fleshed out with details, but at the end of the day she got what she deserved. Personally I liked it and would not have blamed the author if they went even heavier on the revenge. Still you can't please all the people all the time.
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Anonymous02/04/15
Not much to add here.....
....because, again, you didn't get your facts straight. The rushed conclusion with bad, nay, false medical information was a story-killer for me, but more damning, was that you wrote a character that was so obsessed with an idea that no amount of clarity would break through her clouds of delusion.
It is also very likely that she'd been fucking around for some time, possibly a very long time and was unconsciously trying to "get him on board".
His response was not very realistic. Too much in keeping with the "gentler" tradition in these halls and not the world we walk through every day.
YOU DESPERATELY NEED TO DO SOME RESEARCH BEFORE YOU WRITE A STORY, IF YOU'RE GOING TO DELVE INTO ANYTHING YOU DON'T REALLY KNOW ABOUT.
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Anonymous02/07/15
Assumptions
I've read Assumptions and now Hubby Said No. A bit simplistic. I'll give one more a try.
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Anonymous02/25/15
Wank
I think this author is a pathetic moralistic nasty little wanker
...being a one-woman-man does not fit, right?
Anyway (as usual) a story with hardly any content or plot and (also as usual) way too short with only just a page.2 stars
It's not paying attention to the details that hurts a story.
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Anonymous06/02/15
dear annony is at it again. Everyday this asshole reads these
stories and cries and bitches like the fag he is. You really have to ask yourself why this retard reads these and then complains about them or the writer. I gave it a 5 for content and the idea of the husband typing to get the wife to stop her idea of cheating! The end justifies the action. And dear annony eat shit and die. God you are a asshol
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Anonymous07/23/15
He can blame himself for stopping sex to see what she would do
NOBODY could be as stupid as she seemed to be. As she herself said, she didn't hear what she didn't want to hear.
While I DO agree with those who say you can't stop someone from cheating, in THIS case, where she somehow managed to convince herself that hubby was turned on by it, if he had crashed in on them, told her, "Look, I'm here, he's here, and I'm TELLING you I DO NOT WANT THIS!" even someone as apparently clueless as she seems to be would have to accept it and come home.
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Anonymous07/30/15
You cannot cure a stupid wife by words...
... only by beating the last little piece of brain out of her dumb head.
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Anonymous08/01/15
To anon 7/23...health class?!!
Undiagnosed and untreated syphilis does lead to dementia and death. If she was too stupid to listen to her husband, she definitely was too stupid to realize she had an STD and get treatment.
Good story, unfortunately this is a story that some real cheating wives should read. believe it or not too many women get an STD just the way she did and a lot of them tend to try blaming it on their husbands or boyfriends. Well in your story all I can say is the bitch got what she deserved.
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Anonymous12/03/15
meh
I like a dead cheater but it all seemed pretty flat to me.
There Is More Reality To This Than In Most Stories
Almost everyone I went to school with, including myself have had at least one failed marriage. But the real shocker is how many of the girls who stepped outside their marriage for sex contracted STD's and gave them to either her husband or another lover. More stories should have the spread of STD's as an element of their stories. And I personally know at least five women who had teddy bears for husbands. They wouldn't harm a fly. But when they found out their wives had had affairs, they beat some sense into their wives...and the men were almost beaten to death by a jilted husband and a group of his friends. Not enough stories of this nature either.
because dear annony is a old ugly fag ass fag with ED who hate everything
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Anonymous05/16/16
dead wives tell no lies
5*
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Anonymous09/09/16
lucky man
He is her 3rd husband. She has cheated the entire marriage. Details exposing her found on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com. TRUE STORY REAL LIFE.
Details on Facebook took place she was in 50s and a grandmother. She never used condoms. She requested and engaged in anal sex. She stuck tongue in lover's butthole and licked for 15 minutes. She begged for golden hower on clit. She loved to give blowjobs and eagerly swallowed. She never checked for diseases.
Husband knows and is lucky
LUCKY HE WAS NOT INFECTED.
SHE REPEATEDLY LEFT CUM FILLED PANTIES FOR HUSBAND TO FIND AND PRESS FACE INTO. WORD IS HE LICKED THE CREAM FILLED CENTER
THEN I HEARD HE BECAME ILL
MAYBE HIS LUCK RAN OUT
Did not waste more than about 2 minutes of my life.
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Anonymous12/28/16
How Are Most Cheaters Uncovered?
Most cheaters are discovered when a spouse passes on an STD to their faithful spouse...or they become pregnant and hubby has had been 'snipped' or has no sperm count...or children accidentally see and tell...or a neighbor tells...or they are seen by an acquaintance of their spouse. Need more stories like this.
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Anonymous01/18/17
Big Boobs
I am so sick and tired of all these stories where the woman has either D or DD boobs. How about just having a woman with cow udder transplants instead?
One sentence took this good story down a notch for me.
"Kathy was heartbroken. She never realised how Mike really felt."
I think this guy was pretty obvious about how he felt AND how he would react to her cheating. Thanks for the story.
English
Cliff's Notes version
a brief sketch, in outline form.
She didn't pay attention in class, there was a test later, and she failed.
poor ending
I was with you there until the ending. Too much like a 50s hygeine film. This can happen to you! Thanks for the scare tactics. They worked decades ago.
Too abbreviated
thanks for the offering.
Why I didn't like the story
This site is about erotic fantasy. To me that means stories that don't let the real world intrude. In the fantasy world of this site, everyone is always ready and available for sex, and all encounters ultimately end with amazing orgasms. Kids, jobs, paying bills, grocery shopping - none of that real world stuff gets in the way. There are no consequences - unwanted pregnancy, disease, broken marriages, damaged reputations - and of course there's no need for birth control. That's all part of the fun and fantasy (I believe that Nancy Friday, while analyzing sexual fantasies herself, acknowledged that the ultimate goal of erotic fantasy was sexual excitement).
I read the story with mild interest. It was not as erotic as others I've read, and the arguing between the couple over the idea of her having another man just seemed to be getting in the way of the action. I stuck with it as I wanted to see where it was going. I wondered if the woman would be proven right, that her husband really was turned on by the idea and that it would either end in a threesome or with them having amazing sex (typical plot paths for the "wife wants to try another man" storyline). I didn't find the ending to be at all erotic or exciting. Instead it was just sad and depressing. Maybe I'm old fashioned; I want my erotica to have a happy ending!
I spent several minutes reading many of the other comments and mulling over how I felt about the story, and why. I even picked another of your stories ("Immaculate Conception") and read it, just to see how something else you had written compared to this story. I noticed that both stories had negative consequences for the person (a woman, in both cases) who cheated. Are all of your stories morality tales that focus on cheating women, and the consequences they must deal with? If so, we obviously have different ideas of what constitutes erotica.
This is actually the first time I've commented on any story on this site, although I've been here many times and read many stories. I think the volume of comments and the extreme reactions led me to want to throw in my own two cents.
Tired, boring, cliche, God's revenge. Yawn
Why not have Satan himself jump up and brand her with an everlasting firey "A" on her chest? That's just as realistic as her not treating syphilis and dying with dementia in a year.
How can they be well matched but can't talk about sex? If one party says their sex life needs spicing up, it does. If the other party doesn't think so it just means he's satisfied and she's not. The "satisfied" partner needs to do something to keep the other in the fold if he loves her instead of just an image of her. It can be done or it's at least worth trying. Just shutting her down without coming up with alternatives is a recipe for disaster. The unsatisfied partner will cheat or leave. The unsatisfied partner, after trying to improve things in the marriage, should ask for joint counseling. If that fails or is refused, of course she should seek a divorce instead of cheating.
Easy to write into that direction
I agree that storyline is much better to show the betrayed husbands find better woman instead of the cheating ex wives, but the authors must build more energy to write the stories into that direction. With a quick twist to close a story is easy.
wow
i get the feeling the writer of this has been cheated on in the past, to have her die is kinda fucked up man, if you dont like cheating that is fair enough but it is supposed to be an erotic story. what the fuck?
Now that is getting revenge in a hurry
Will not criticize you for venting because, at least, you wrote a story to do it. Good on you. You were in such a hurry to get to revenge you ignored medical facts about the progress of that disease. Sounded more like aids in its timing of symptoms but like syphilis in the actual body symptoms. Overall a weak effort for readers but hoped it helped your emotional state
Curious...
Someone said this might reflect something personal, but this wasn't your first tale. I think Iron Dragon said it was more outline than story. I think he's right. We all get an idea, get excited, and pour it out without thinking. D.Q. Steele's "When We Were Married" was the closest to what I thought was a personal experience, especially the beginning. If you haven't, you should read that. In fact you should read all of DQS's stuff before you write another word. Just my opinion mind you.
can you love a sad tale?
she got what she deserved, too bad it didn't last longer. now half of the rest of his life he wont trust a woman, while although it's a good rule of thumb, if everyone did we wouldn't have the population we do now.
I Don't Get It
Why all the negative comment about this story? Yes it would be nice to get the storyline more fleshed out with details, but at the end of the day she got what she deserved. Personally I liked it and would not have blamed the author if they went even heavier on the revenge. Still you can't please all the people all the time.
Not much to add here.....
....because, again, you didn't get your facts straight. The rushed conclusion with bad, nay, false medical information was a story-killer for me, but more damning, was that you wrote a character that was so obsessed with an idea that no amount of clarity would break through her clouds of delusion.
It is also very likely that she'd been fucking around for some time, possibly a very long time and was unconsciously trying to "get him on board".
His response was not very realistic. Too much in keeping with the "gentler" tradition in these halls and not the world we walk through every day.
YOU DESPERATELY NEED TO DO SOME RESEARCH BEFORE YOU WRITE A STORY, IF YOU'RE GOING TO DELVE INTO ANYTHING YOU DON'T REALLY KNOW ABOUT.
Assumptions
I've read Assumptions and now Hubby Said No. A bit simplistic. I'll give one more a try.
Wank
I think this author is a pathetic moralistic nasty little wanker
2 stars
nuff said
Guess you meant he wants a one-man-woman..
...being a one-woman-man does not fit, right?
Anyway (as usual) a story with hardly any content or plot and (also as usual) way too short with only just a page.2 stars
CATHY'S CLOWN
till the bitter end for not understanding the meaning of NO. TK U MLJ LV NV
You don't die from syphilis in a year.
It's not paying attention to the details that hurts a story.
dear annony is at it again. Everyday this asshole reads these
stories and cries and bitches like the fag he is. You really have to ask yourself why this retard reads these and then complains about them or the writer. I gave it a 5 for content and the idea of the husband typing to get the wife to stop her idea of cheating! The end justifies the action. And dear annony eat shit and die. God you are a asshol
He can blame himself for stopping sex to see what she would do
Who dies from syphliss? Poorly written story.
Blah
NOBODY could be as stupid as she seemed to be. As she herself said, she didn't hear what she didn't want to hear.
While I DO agree with those who say you can't stop someone from cheating, in THIS case, where she somehow managed to convince herself that hubby was turned on by it, if he had crashed in on them, told her, "Look, I'm here, he's here, and I'm TELLING you I DO NOT WANT THIS!" even someone as apparently clueless as she seems to be would have to accept it and come home.
You cannot cure a stupid wife by words...
... only by beating the last little piece of brain out of her dumb head.
To anon 7/23...health class?!!
Undiagnosed and untreated syphilis does lead to dementia and death. If she was too stupid to listen to her husband, she definitely was too stupid to realize she had an STD and get treatment.
yuuuup
Good story, unfortunately this is a story that some real cheating wives should read. believe it or not too many women get an STD just the way she did and a lot of them tend to try blaming it on their husbands or boyfriends. Well in your story all I can say is the bitch got what she deserved.
meh
I like a dead cheater but it all seemed pretty flat to me.
There Is More Reality To This Than In Most Stories
Almost everyone I went to school with, including myself have had at least one failed marriage. But the real shocker is how many of the girls who stepped outside their marriage for sex contracted STD's and gave them to either her husband or another lover. More stories should have the spread of STD's as an element of their stories. And I personally know at least five women who had teddy bears for husbands. They wouldn't harm a fly. But when they found out their wives had had affairs, they beat some sense into their wives...and the men were almost beaten to death by a jilted husband and a group of his friends. Not enough stories of this nature either.
WELL, AT LEAST SHE PAID...THE PRICE.... AND HER COST
but I wonder did she learn anything. TK U MLJ LV NV
Good beginning
Story started well but tailed off to the ending 3*
My opinion of the story
Retarded ending to this story. I give it 2 thumbs down !
We all wish someone woulf OFF your sorry ass dear annony!
5 to help the score.
1*
fag cuck shit.
5
because dear annony is a old ugly fag ass fag with ED who hate everything
dead wives tell no lies
5*
lucky man
He is her 3rd husband. She has cheated the entire marriage. Details exposing her found on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com. TRUE STORY REAL LIFE.
Details on Facebook took place she was in 50s and a grandmother. She never used condoms. She requested and engaged in anal sex. She stuck tongue in lover's butthole and licked for 15 minutes. She begged for golden hower on clit. She loved to give blowjobs and eagerly swallowed. She never checked for diseases.
Husband knows and is lucky
LUCKY HE WAS NOT INFECTED.
SHE REPEATEDLY LEFT CUM FILLED PANTIES FOR HUSBAND TO FIND AND PRESS FACE INTO. WORD IS HE LICKED THE CREAM FILLED CENTER
THEN I HEARD HE BECAME ILL
MAYBE HIS LUCK RAN OUT
You Know
This should be the outcome of all cheaters.
Ugh...??
Yuk, I guess...
At least it was a short piece of crap.
Did not waste more than about 2 minutes of my life.
How Are Most Cheaters Uncovered?
Most cheaters are discovered when a spouse passes on an STD to their faithful spouse...or they become pregnant and hubby has had been 'snipped' or has no sperm count...or children accidentally see and tell...or a neighbor tells...or they are seen by an acquaintance of their spouse. Need more stories like this.
Big Boobs
I am so sick and tired of all these stories where the woman has either D or DD boobs. How about just having a woman with cow udder transplants instead?
One Sentence!
One sentence took this good story down a notch for me.
"Kathy was heartbroken. She never realised how Mike really felt."
I think this guy was pretty obvious about how he felt AND how he would react to her cheating. Thanks for the story.
She seemed to be deaf and not dumb.
She ended up getting them both out of the gene pool.
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