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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous01/05/15

Mind the gap....

I suppose it's as wide as the Paris Metro

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by NeoDiotima01/06/15

watch perspective

maintain POV. For example, a 'tight' pussy or a 'gaping' pussy is of the man's experience not the woman's. if you choose to make the woman the narrator, you can't make direct appeals to experience particular to the man in her voice. you can have him say 'your pussy is tight'. But not 'he loves my tight pussy'.

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