It reads like you were watching something on television or reading a comic book and tried to describe what you saw. Basically, this read like a book report.
THE NAKED MAN.... nice one
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Awkward narration.
It reads like you were watching something on television or reading a comic book and tried to describe what you saw. Basically, this read like a book report.
really ?
THE NAKED MAN.... nice one
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