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The Whore in the Basement

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by Anonymous01/05/15

Please develop characters

To make the story more interesting/compelling, I suggest you develop the characters - provide us some glimpse into who they are - their thoughts, backgrounds, jobs, or descriptions - because currently the 3 men are interchangeable - nothing unique about them except their names. This will help your story "stand out" from other authors.

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