Way to many error that distract form the story as I have to figure out what you mean. UGH!
You need a proofreader or even an editor. LIT can put you in touch with one or more of each. Or you can seek out one of your own. Someone you know and trust. But get one very soon as your writing are very good just to be ruined by mostly misspellings or left out words and expressions.
As an example, "she heard Ms. Sinclair's stream it the water in the toilet". One missing letter stops the reader dead in their tracks whist they attempt to figure what is missing in the sentence. There are many of these types of error. Plus others!!
For this alone you get a 1 star rating from me. I would give you a NO star rating if there was one.
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You need an editor or proofreader
Way to many error that distract form the story as I have to figure out what you mean. UGH!
You need a proofreader or even an editor. LIT can put you in touch with one or more of each. Or you can seek out one of your own. Someone you know and trust. But get one very soon as your writing are very good just to be ruined by mostly misspellings or left out words and expressions.
As an example, "she heard Ms. Sinclair's stream it the water in the toilet". One missing letter stops the reader dead in their tracks whist they attempt to figure what is missing in the sentence. There are many of these types of error. Plus others!!
For this alone you get a 1 star rating from me. I would give you a NO star rating if there was one.
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