Stop now while you're still behind. Not a single clever or original thing in this mess. Thoroughly detestable characters. Violence without rhyme or reason. Just plain awful.
Fuck the naysayers. I like where this is going; the best part is that I found you while you're new. I've been reading stories on here for years, and YOU made me finally join. In fact, you inspired my username. I wanted to be able to favorite you so I could follow your stories. Ok, maybe this story has a similar plot to some we've seen before, but aren't they all? I think if you build the characters more, this could be fantastic. The first story gives us the important background info, and the next 2 both had some action, but I like my stories a little longer; I don't always want novels, but 1 page is a little short, in my personal opinion. I really like where this could go. I think your writing is great, especially because it isn't full of terrible spelling and grammatical errors (I find those so distracting that I sometimes can't even get off!) At any rate, please continue!
For some reason other people don't seem to like this one, but I thought it was quite good. The writing is descriptive and colourful, and the progression of the domination and general mindfuck is well done. Really hot story, as always.
English
Ridiculous
Stupidity runs amok
Stop now while you're still behind. Not a single clever or original thing in this mess. Thoroughly detestable characters. Violence without rhyme or reason. Just plain awful.
Yes, please!
Fuck the naysayers. I like where this is going; the best part is that I found you while you're new. I've been reading stories on here for years, and YOU made me finally join. In fact, you inspired my username. I wanted to be able to favorite you so I could follow your stories. Ok, maybe this story has a similar plot to some we've seen before, but aren't they all? I think if you build the characters more, this could be fantastic. The first story gives us the important background info, and the next 2 both had some action, but I like my stories a little longer; I don't always want novels, but 1 page is a little short, in my personal opinion. I really like where this could go. I think your writing is great, especially because it isn't full of terrible spelling and grammatical errors (I find those so distracting that I sometimes can't even get off!) At any rate, please continue!
Another hot sequel
For some reason other people don't seem to like this one, but I thought it was quite good. The writing is descriptive and colourful, and the progression of the domination and general mindfuck is well done. Really hot story, as always.
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