Julie Loves Her Daddy

Lack of follow up

She leaves her room naked, toilets, then enters dad room and removes her panties & Bra. Come on stupid mistakes like that are indications that you don't even read your own stuff

No dialog till the end? Try again. This read like a "how to" magazine.

Naked

Or panties and bra? make up your mind. Mistake that ruins a story

Good imagination

You cant please everyone, Your writing will improve with experience, Keep up the good work, I enjoyed your story.
Alex

This was a good read. I enjoyed it. Simple mistakes happen all the time and I do not believe it ruined or tainted the story in any way. Some people are just too picky

Good short story

Quite a few women have seen well endowed Dad naked and it makes lasting impression. Often other guys don't measure up and they are not satisfied until they get the real thing.

Gummy bear

There's not much conversation you need more conversation .