Great use of language to convey the feeling of a cozy morning interrupted in the best way possible. Some unusually aggressive word choices and descriptions for such a peaceful, domestic scene, but they worked in the overall fabric of the piece. I'm a fale reader, but didn't have difficulty relating to the male second - person POV because of the universality of the sensations described.
For a nicely written, hot little scene. I would maybe have made a few different word choices for what is overall a romantic scene, but I really enjoyed reading it. Nice use of the second person.
Such a perfectly written scene. I'm not one for second person POV, but this is so expertly done that it has made me a believer. Even though this is told from a male's perspective, it was not lost on me. In fact, it provides a lot of insight into what goes through the mind of a man receiving the best of "good mornings".
English
Hot Sensory Sketch
Great use of language to convey the feeling of a cozy morning interrupted in the best way possible. Some unusually aggressive word choices and descriptions for such a peaceful, domestic scene, but they worked in the overall fabric of the piece. I'm a fale reader, but didn't have difficulty relating to the male second - person POV because of the universality of the sensations described.
Interesting twist on
A simple blowjob. I enjoyed it!
dope
I love that this is in the 2nd person. Really draws you in. Nice.
The perfect length
For a nicely written, hot little scene. I would maybe have made a few different word choices for what is overall a romantic scene, but I really enjoyed reading it. Nice use of the second person.
Such a perfectly written scene. I'm not one for second person POV, but this is so expertly done that it has made me a believer. Even though this is told from a male's perspective, it was not lost on me. In fact, it provides a lot of insight into what goes through the mind of a man receiving the best of "good mornings".
Please keep up this excellent quality writing!
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