He wants her to be sexually comfortable and open and when she is he sees it negatively? I enjoyed the sex scene, but not his excuse for starting it. I don't see how that reinforces her being more sexual. As she said, wtf? I would be in full sweats from now on if I'm going to get yanked around for being naked. If that part is meant to be playful, it missed for me. The rest is well done. I liked you showing his thoughts concerning pushing her boundaries. Overall, a great first story.
Thank you for this story, BeccaBonor, and pay no attention to those who snipe at you from the parapet of 'Anonymity'. Welcome, and please bring us more.
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Anonymous01/16/15
Breakfast
The most important meal of the day.
Well done, write more
English
Cocky?
He wants her to be sexually comfortable and open and when she is he sees it negatively? I enjoyed the sex scene, but not his excuse for starting it. I don't see how that reinforces her being more sexual. As she said, wtf? I would be in full sweats from now on if I'm going to get yanked around for being naked. If that part is meant to be playful, it missed for me. The rest is well done. I liked you showing his thoughts concerning pushing her boundaries. Overall, a great first story.
Great first story!
Well written and well thought out, hope there will be more. Disregard the negative nonnies. Five stars. Welcome to Lit!
A fine introduction to a new author's talent
Thank you for this story, BeccaBonor, and pay no attention to those who snipe at you from the parapet of 'Anonymity'. Welcome, and please bring us more.
Breakfast
The most important meal of the day.
Well done, write more
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