...does not a story make. I only made it through the first word before I stopped reading. Sorry, but I can't stand stories that address the reader as "you."
It's a shame, because I like the concept of the submissive wife. Perhaps rewrite the story in the first or third person, add some content, and then place it in the proper (BDSM) category.
This thing of npeople calling others by Sir, remember me a movie with Sidney Poitier called: "To sir, with love"!!!! In the last times the term Sir changed of meaning...2*
Thanks for biting the proverbial bullet and submitting your first story. Shame it wasn't better received, because it's not bad at all. Yes, it probably would have been put under BDSM, but that's not a capital crime. She seems like a pretty loving wife to me! Hopefully, you won't be too discouraged to write more...
Anyway, I liked it and gave it five stars.
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Anonymous01/12/15
At Least You Tried
It's more than I can say for myself. Can't say I liked the story all that much. Maybe the next one will be better in content and writing.
English
A Nice Fantasy
Sounds like almost every man's dream wife. Almost. Cuffs and collar optional. A fun read.
Piece of typical Literotica trash.
Only sicko's, like betrayedbylove, will enjoy this. Reader, if you enjoy this you need to get a psycho checkup.
Good concept
Bad execution...Needs more dialouge and detail. Also, the category is BDSM. Loving Wives is about cheating wives having affairs.
Sorry
If you insist on writing in the second person, please excuse me for ignoring you.
Eight paragraphs
...does not a story make. I only made it through the first word before I stopped reading. Sorry, but I can't stand stories that address the reader as "you."
It's a shame, because I like the concept of the submissive wife. Perhaps rewrite the story in the first or third person, add some content, and then place it in the proper (BDSM) category.
This thing of Sir!!!
This thing of npeople calling others by Sir, remember me a movie with Sidney Poitier called: "To sir, with love"!!!! In the last times the term Sir changed of meaning...2*
Thank you!
Thanks for biting the proverbial bullet and submitting your first story. Shame it wasn't better received, because it's not bad at all. Yes, it probably would have been put under BDSM, but that's not a capital crime. She seems like a pretty loving wife to me! Hopefully, you won't be too discouraged to write more...
Anyway, I liked it and gave it five stars.
At Least You Tried
It's more than I can say for myself. Can't say I liked the story all that much. Maybe the next one will be better in content and writing.
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