All Comments on 'Heisenberg's Principle'

If the purpose of poetry is to make people feel something different - even if just for a moment - then you have succeeded admirably. I don't mean that ironically or as faint praise, it really was lovely, thank you.

Nicely done, legerdemer. Using scientific concepts metaphorically I think is a real challenge. Not so inclined myself, I had to look them up. In today's Internet world and cyber poetry, that's only a click or two away. That's not a problem PROVIDED that the rest of the piece is well crafted. This is.

The first stanza felt like I was opening a textbook, which set the tone for me right away. In that regard, I'm wondering what would have been gained (or lost) if "Heisenberg's principle" was the first line? Nothing perhaps; just a thought.

Nice alliteration; not overdone IMO. Saying less is sometimes more. The 5th stanza with just 2 lines compared to the others, although of course they're short too, gave emphasis nonetheless to the image for me as I read it.

The last stanza was intriguing; the female counterpart to Pygmalion perhaps?

Very imaginative poem.

to receive satisfaction. TK U MLJ LV NV

GM basically says it all, thanks for sharing

or would Berkeley give truth to Plato's lies?

Beautifully stated, legerdemer, the uncertain shadow that falls between the ideal and the realization.

Thanks for the metaphor...