Holy fuck that was hot!! I almost skipped over it thinking I had already read this story, damn I would have missed out! Wow :). The brothers cheesy pushing, sisters casual restraint 'our parents are right THERE! They could see us!' The subtle humor there, heh. Then bam! Role reversal. ...and it was on!
The erotica and sex was impressively well written, I was impressed and not even slightly bored. Original and eye catching. Damn, I was slow burning hard till the end ;)
Thanks for writing!!
Nothing could find a charm of feelings like that of sex between a brother and sister; unless of course it was occurring between fraternal twins. Five big gold stars.
WTF!!! Really; surely not everyone's as bad as this author??
I actually managed to get as far as page 3 before realising I was feeling quite ill. Oh, not because of the storyline, but because of the discrepancies contained within!!
Is everyone completely unable to see the obvious?? Let's make it easy, allow me to copy one sentence ~ 'We were spooning in the bed with my "chest against hers" and my chin right at her shoulder.' Now for the less fortunate, who still cannot see the obvious; We have all possibly heard of the 'Beast with two backs', but this particular example must surely rank up there with the likes of 'Go fuck yourself', again OK as long as you've got the equipment to enable yourself to perform that delicate operation
without the use of either dildo's or fingers!!!!
Now, I don't mean to disparage this or any other author, but surely it must be beneficial to either have a proof-reader, a grammar and /or spell checker; and first and foremost a basic knowledge of the human anatomy (and the positions it can get into!!!) Please don't me discourage you from writing; after this, the only way is UP!!
-Their parents are either naïve, or ignoring what is going on
- What happened to little brother,
Get taken by aliens?
I am through
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Anonymous02/28/16
Screw the others! !!!!!!
It was great! If you can't get beyond the gaps or missing details then maybe you should just Shut Up. Did you really let those ruin the story for you? ????
The story could have been written better (inconsistencies and a few other minor issues). However, once you get beyond the mistakes, it is a good story. The buildup was inviting and the risks taken were believable. All in all, the story guided me through an enjoyable journey.
the long, slow, reluctant build was almost brilliant.
by
Anonymous05/16/16
I liked your story.
I would have liked to be in the character's head a bit more. What was going on between them? Long standing attraction? Pushing the edge of the envelope just to see what would happen? A true love affair? But still, In liked your story.
This story was progressing towards a believable romance between the brother and sister. Then the author ruined it by turning it into a three or four way sex story. The whole plot turned into the author trying to write as many sex seems as he could.
The waiting is so worth it. One of the best stories I've read here. Thank you
by
Anonymous09/03/16
Wonderful!
Just, wow! Thank you!
by
Anonymous10/20/16
What's wrong with the World.
If only each of us had experienced such a lovely relationship and intro into good, honest, heart-felt sex, with our sibling(s) then perhaps, Life's difficulties: Growing up, hormones no one helps you with and other relationships would be just so much easier to deal with. Excellent story! Really enjoyed the read.... thank you for sharing.
by
Anonymous11/27/16
Very Nice ! Easily a full 4 stars !
I have never posted on here before, but if the author is reading this comment, I tell you this was excellent ! This is the only place (online or off) that I've ever read anything erotic based. And this may be the very best story out of all the stories I've read here. My orgasm was great ! One thing though, perhaps you could have added some lines about her squirting, her facesitting him, and some good, hard anal sex into the mix. (Maybe even have her give him a little golden shower action too) How she started talkin' really dirty was a nice change of pace. Would have liked to hear a little more of it even. Also, it would not have hurt to write a few sentences at the end to tell how their future progressed. (Did they never fuck again afterwards? Did they fuck every now and then ? Have a full-on private relationship ?) Just seemed like it ended pretty quickly after all of that build-up with their talking during the days about emotions etc A quick summary of their future would have been nice even though I think relationships are immoral b/c they're selfish/clingy. Btw, the author's username cracked me up.
by
Anonymous02/19/17
Favourite sex story!!
It is wonderfully written, and it makes my cock hard from the very start. You should write a series from the point of view of Sara! It makes me want to fuck my own sis!
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Anonymous02/20/17
It's the best. Really.
How long has it been since you uploaded this? I couldn't tell you exactly but it's been years, I'd wager. To me, that's remarkable! That a story could have existed for so long, nearly untouched, and still be what is, in my opinion, the best story on the site is astounding. I commend you. I'm thinking of beginning a short series myself, but I've never worked up the courage to really do anything with my ideas, and reading this again might be just what I needed to muster the willpower. Many thanks.
English
great story
step by step, touch by touch, until barrier after barrier slid away so they could reach the point where they both wanted to be.
well written.
Hot!
Well written. The story developed quite naturally. Reluctance overcome by proximity. It will be interseting to see where you can go with this now.
Holy fuck that was hot!! I almost skipped over it thinking I had already read this story, damn I would have missed out! Wow :). The brothers cheesy pushing, sisters casual restraint 'our parents are right THERE! They could see us!' The subtle humor there, heh. Then bam! Role reversal. ...and it was on!
The erotica and sex was impressively well written, I was impressed and not even slightly bored. Original and eye catching. Damn, I was slow burning hard till the end ;)
Thanks for writing!!
Brother and sister
Nothing could find a charm of feelings like that of sex between a brother and sister; unless of course it was occurring between fraternal twins. Five big gold stars.
WTF!!! Really; surely not everyone's as bad as this author??
I actually managed to get as far as page 3 before realising I was feeling quite ill. Oh, not because of the storyline, but because of the discrepancies contained within!!
Is everyone completely unable to see the obvious?? Let's make it easy, allow me to copy one sentence ~ 'We were spooning in the bed with my "chest against hers" and my chin right at her shoulder.' Now for the less fortunate, who still cannot see the obvious; We have all possibly heard of the 'Beast with two backs', but this particular example must surely rank up there with the likes of 'Go fuck yourself', again OK as long as you've got the equipment to enable yourself to perform that delicate operation
without the use of either dildo's or fingers!!!!
Now, I don't mean to disparage this or any other author, but surely it must be beneficial to either have a proof-reader, a grammar and /or spell checker; and first and foremost a basic knowledge of the human anatomy (and the positions it can get into!!!) Please don't me discourage you from writing; after this, the only way is UP!!
sorry you have wandered
-Their parents are either naïve, or ignoring what is going on
- What happened to little brother,
Get taken by aliens?
I am through
Screw the others! !!!!!!
It was great! If you can't get beyond the gaps or missing details then maybe you should just Shut Up. Did you really let those ruin the story for you? ????
I....thought it was great. Thank you so much.
Good story
Screw the other comments. I liked the story
Great Story Line
The story could have been written better (inconsistencies and a few other minor issues). However, once you get beyond the mistakes, it is a good story. The buildup was inviting and the risks taken were believable. All in all, the story guided me through an enjoyable journey.
minor errors aside
the long, slow, reluctant build was almost brilliant.
I liked your story.
I would have liked to be in the character's head a bit more. What was going on between them? Long standing attraction? Pushing the edge of the envelope just to see what would happen? A true love affair? But still, In liked your story.
Not so good towards the end
This story was progressing towards a believable romance between the brother and sister. Then the author ruined it by turning it into a three or four way sex story. The whole plot turned into the author trying to write as many sex seems as he could.
Damn this is hot!
The waiting is so worth it. One of the best stories I've read here. Thank you
Wonderful!
Just, wow! Thank you!
What's wrong with the World.
If only each of us had experienced such a lovely relationship and intro into good, honest, heart-felt sex, with our sibling(s) then perhaps, Life's difficulties: Growing up, hormones no one helps you with and other relationships would be just so much easier to deal with. Excellent story! Really enjoyed the read.... thank you for sharing.
Very Nice ! Easily a full 4 stars !
I have never posted on here before, but if the author is reading this comment, I tell you this was excellent ! This is the only place (online or off) that I've ever read anything erotic based. And this may be the very best story out of all the stories I've read here. My orgasm was great ! One thing though, perhaps you could have added some lines about her squirting, her facesitting him, and some good, hard anal sex into the mix. (Maybe even have her give him a little golden shower action too) How she started talkin' really dirty was a nice change of pace. Would have liked to hear a little more of it even. Also, it would not have hurt to write a few sentences at the end to tell how their future progressed. (Did they never fuck again afterwards? Did they fuck every now and then ? Have a full-on private relationship ?) Just seemed like it ended pretty quickly after all of that build-up with their talking during the days about emotions etc A quick summary of their future would have been nice even though I think relationships are immoral b/c they're selfish/clingy. Btw, the author's username cracked me up.
Favourite sex story!!
It is wonderfully written, and it makes my cock hard from the very start. You should write a series from the point of view of Sara! It makes me want to fuck my own sis!
It's the best. Really.
How long has it been since you uploaded this? I couldn't tell you exactly but it's been years, I'd wager. To me, that's remarkable! That a story could have existed for so long, nearly untouched, and still be what is, in my opinion, the best story on the site is astounding. I commend you. I'm thinking of beginning a short series myself, but I've never worked up the courage to really do anything with my ideas, and reading this again might be just what I needed to muster the willpower. Many thanks.
Makes me wish I had a sister
If only I had a sister like that.
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