Chloe Finds a New Way

Hope her leg heals soon

All this talk of her crutch...

Cute Story.

This was a good reading story, I liked the way you put just a dash of humor in it. Sadly to say though. That marriage wouldn't survive much longer. At least, not the way its written.

1*

Also today a new baboon..........

Great story!!!

Congratulations!!!

i guess

people like this author do exist i can only hope they don't get out in the real world and bother real people.

gave it a 5 to help thwe writer

and to piss off the asshole annony!

Good start, but...

Please get someone to edit your work before you post it. Learn how to use quotation marks, and yes, she has a CROTCH, not a crutch, unless she's been injured.

Also, tell us about YOUR feelings, not just what happened.

I hope you continue!

Crutch |krəCH|

noun
1 a long stick with a crosspiece at the top, used as a support under the armpit by a lame person.
• [ in sing. ] a thing used for support or reassurance: they use the Internet as a crutch for their loneliness.

2 archaic another term for crotch (of the body or a garment).


ORIGIN Old English crycc, cryc, of Germanic origin; related to Dutch kruk and German Krücke .

Maybe we ought to focus less on word choice and more on character development (or lack of it), readability, and plausibility. She used "crutch" correctly, kinda, and maybe it is is a regional usage thing.

I gave you a 1

To piss off the gay guy that gave you a 5 to piss off the other guy. Your writing sucks.

It's a bad day in LW

Especially when the story is so badly written that the commentators start attacking the commentators instead of commenting on the story. But I suppose this was so bad it was more fun to take potshots at other commentators rather than waste time telling the author how truly bad the story was. Even for fiction this was complete and utter drivel that had paper thin characters spouting inane dialogue. Did you even bother to proof read this mess?

gave it a 1

because it deserved it and to piss off dear bonnie.

re: anonymous- it's a bad day

Most days are bad in loving wives, since 99% of the postings are all willing cuckold, non-erotic fetish stories. Fine for those like bonnietaylor2, frontlinecaster and swingerjoe, but not so good for the majority of us. 1* for another cuckie story....

I Think the Last Line Might be ......

The dumbest ever written.You dont use a condom because you want your stud to take control of your body? Really? Thats so sixth grade.Sad really it could have been a good story until wifey shit all over her husband.Then again people like this usually get what they deserve

Good first effort. Ignore the troll children.

They are a bit jumpy as their mummy doesn't often let them out of the basement.

What an impressive Comentator Flame-War You've sparked!

I'm not going to wade into that morass - well maybe a little bit ;) However, I do have a couple of comments: 1st. A simple Google search of the word 'crutch' would have alerted you to the fact the way you intended it to be understood is archaic usage. Most of the readers here don't understand it. Don't do that again! 2nd. I really, really don't get the Cuck thing. For the life of me, I don't understand what the Cuckold gets out of it. To be fair, you've given the best explanation I've ever read on this site with the line,"I had secretly always wanted her to shag around a bit so that I could too, but I was not going to tell her that." The logical thing would be to just sit down and discuss having an 'Open marriage' or better still just go directly to a divorce. This train of thought could have used some further development and explanation. I really don't understand why some husband is going to sit there and watch his wife being fucked - unless he's filming it for the divorce court! 3rd. On a totally different note. A very simple, but effective, way to self edit a first draft of a story is to read it aloud to yourself. A lot of small glitches will become obvious to you, and you can fix them before publishing your work.

re: anonymous- good first effort

Of course cuckies like you would say that. It's the real "trolls" like you that are in mommies basement that make your type of comment. You cuckies just don't get it, do you? 1*

She broke a rule they had about the condom so now if she gets pregnant he needs to divorce her. She will now continue to cheat on him so it's his fault . You never allow a spouse to fuck around on you, it will never end well

Editor? YES

Most irritating error? My vote would be having a person make a statement (in quotation marks, properly!) but screw up the person. For example: Bull says "We won't have sex unless I approve." ... where the "I" who needed to approve was the Hubby/Narrator ... but of course it READS like Bull has to approve of Bull and Sweetie getting it on! Which is ultimately also true (if the Bull doesn't want to screw Sweetie, then he won't!). This type of error happened at least three times.

At the very least, the author needs to read his own writing several days after writing it! Not to admire it, but to check for slip-ups. They abound.

The story has some potential (within a very tired genre) but the writing mechanics make it unpleasant to suffer through!

3*. Mainly because of the consistency of Hubby's position.

With the misspellings, broken grammar, incomplete sentences.....

.....and changes in person (point of view) suffusing many, many sentences and paragraphs, I found it a sure distraction from the truly horrible story.
It appears, from your writing, that your marriage is all but dead (if the frequency of exciting sex is your measure). So why prolong the agony?
Go your different ways as politely as you can, and you'll both be free to fuck whomever you like.
Just plain stupid!