Quit writing that is the most stupid story I have read.
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Anonymous02/03/15
Seriously?
Last half of submission isn't even a story, makes no sense, and is poorly written.
by
Anonymous02/03/15
Give up
Story starts well but falls apart quickly
by
Anonymous02/03/15
Passionate and well written story of drunken mother wantonly taken by aliens
HOT! HOT! HOT!
Having mother and son plowed up the ass by aliens while dad is forced to watch by his Boston Batwanger daughter is an awesome story concept.
The author weaves a tale of intrigue and seduction by aliens who landed on top of the barn out back. The story pulls you in as they seduce mother and son with their 14" roto rooters.
Please ignore the critics who don't understand hot material written by the village idiot dreamed up while high on crack and LSD.
The first couple paragraphs aren't too bad. In fact, if you compare them with the REST of the story, it kind of makes you wonder whether the two parts are even written by the same person. Those first paragraphs are 'normal'-sounding, while the remainder of the story (from the moment it becomes more "movie script" than an actual narrative) appear to be written by a juvenile to whom English was a rather poorly-taught second language.
This is one of those times when you really wish that Literotica allowed the use of negative numbers to rate a story. This one deserves about a minus 20!
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Anonymous02/03/15
Worst 'story' ever, written by someone who has no basic knowledge of real, colloquial English
Possibly one of the Indian 'writers' who infest this site? The location he/she/it gives is 'Sexland', which tells me 'Indian', as those guys always try just too hard to imply they're smooth, sexy and sophisticated; sex-starved and desperate is more appropriate, plus the uniquely garbled version of English used here that they're all utterly convinced is received-pronunciation, Oxford English.
Of course, I may be wrong, and the author may in fact be a home-grown retard, but wherever the author's from, this is still a shining, glittering, award-winning piece of total crap, almost unique in it's complete lack of comprehensibility, story, understanding of the subject, and ability to hold the readers's interest. I suggest the writer goes away forever and takes up knitting, as he/she/it has no writing or storytelling skills whatsoever.
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Anonymous02/03/15
I dunno
The story's by a first-time contributor, so maybe we should cut the young woman some slack. Besides, I love a story where the boy and his mother keep referring to "his mommy's cunt" and "his mom's warm cunt." Get a boy thinking and talking about that wonderful hairy hole between his mother's legs--the same hole he came out of--and then the dam breaks. All the dumb social inhibitions that've infected his young mind disappear, and the kid's in happy motherfucking mode. The natural mode for boys. Nothing can ever feel as good to a son's hard young cock as his own mother's cunt. He pumps it with more energy and power than ever before. When he blows his balls, it's the biggest load of his life. That's natural too. The boy's shooting his semen up the best twat in the whole fucking world--his own mother's warm wet ever-loving twat. Just where the kid's sperm belongs.
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Anonymous02/03/15
Gawd. What an abortion of an attempt to write a story. The comments on it are better than the first paragraph.
erotica sites have sections for stories written in languages other than English
Perhaps, if this author were to write in their own native language, and submit stories to an audience who reads it, their efforts would be better appreciated. As it is, it is too clumsy and awkward to enjoy.
If only these comments were visible at the top of the "story", so we wouldn't suffer through garbage such as this.
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Anonymous02/09/15
pitiful attempt
Get a better grasp on the English language and a better grip on the art of seduction. Then ya might wanna take a writing class to learn how to tell a decent story. This is complete shit.
You began your tale in one style then switched styles very suddenly. The style you switched to is so awful I could not complete reading this farce. Its good that your OUTLINED the rest of the story like that but at least go back and write the story like the first part BEFORE you submit it.
I thought Literotica would catch stuff like this judging from what others say on how hard it is to submit stories to it.
English
Quit writing that is the most stupid story I have read.
Seriously?
Last half of submission isn't even a story, makes no sense, and is poorly written.
Give up
Story starts well but falls apart quickly
Passionate and well written story of drunken mother wantonly taken by aliens
HOT! HOT! HOT!
Having mother and son plowed up the ass by aliens while dad is forced to watch by his Boston Batwanger daughter is an awesome story concept.
The author weaves a tale of intrigue and seduction by aliens who landed on top of the barn out back. The story pulls you in as they seduce mother and son with their 14" roto rooters.
Please ignore the critics who don't understand hot material written by the village idiot dreamed up while high on crack and LSD.
MORE MORE MORE!!!!!
maaaaate
Please stop, you're embarrassing yourself.
Two words, for this story: "GAR" and "BAGE"!
The first couple paragraphs aren't too bad. In fact, if you compare them with the REST of the story, it kind of makes you wonder whether the two parts are even written by the same person. Those first paragraphs are 'normal'-sounding, while the remainder of the story (from the moment it becomes more "movie script" than an actual narrative) appear to be written by a juvenile to whom English was a rather poorly-taught second language.
This is one of those times when you really wish that Literotica allowed the use of negative numbers to rate a story. This one deserves about a minus 20!
Worst 'story' ever, written by someone who has no basic knowledge of real, colloquial English
Possibly one of the Indian 'writers' who infest this site? The location he/she/it gives is 'Sexland', which tells me 'Indian', as those guys always try just too hard to imply they're smooth, sexy and sophisticated; sex-starved and desperate is more appropriate, plus the uniquely garbled version of English used here that they're all utterly convinced is received-pronunciation, Oxford English.
Of course, I may be wrong, and the author may in fact be a home-grown retard, but wherever the author's from, this is still a shining, glittering, award-winning piece of total crap, almost unique in it's complete lack of comprehensibility, story, understanding of the subject, and ability to hold the readers's interest. I suggest the writer goes away forever and takes up knitting, as he/she/it has no writing or storytelling skills whatsoever.
I dunno
The story's by a first-time contributor, so maybe we should cut the young woman some slack. Besides, I love a story where the boy and his mother keep referring to "his mommy's cunt" and "his mom's warm cunt." Get a boy thinking and talking about that wonderful hairy hole between his mother's legs--the same hole he came out of--and then the dam breaks. All the dumb social inhibitions that've infected his young mind disappear, and the kid's in happy motherfucking mode. The natural mode for boys. Nothing can ever feel as good to a son's hard young cock as his own mother's cunt. He pumps it with more energy and power than ever before. When he blows his balls, it's the biggest load of his life. That's natural too. The boy's shooting his semen up the best twat in the whole fucking world--his own mother's warm wet ever-loving twat. Just where the kid's sperm belongs.
Gawd. What an abortion of an attempt to write a story. The comments on it are better than the first paragraph.
Atrocious!
That is the kindest comment I can give you.
erotica sites have sections for stories written in languages other than English
Perhaps, if this author were to write in their own native language, and submit stories to an audience who reads it, their efforts would be better appreciated. As it is, it is too clumsy and awkward to enjoy.
Most authors on here are bad but you are abismal
yuck no seduction, wouldnt happen
So Bad, So Very, Very Bad
If only these comments were visible at the top of the "story", so we wouldn't suffer through garbage such as this.
pitiful attempt
Get a better grasp on the English language and a better grip on the art of seduction. Then ya might wanna take a writing class to learn how to tell a decent story. This is complete shit.
Geez
You began your tale in one style then switched styles very suddenly. The style you switched to is so awful I could not complete reading this farce. Its good that your OUTLINED the rest of the story like that but at least go back and write the story like the first part BEFORE you submit it.
I thought Literotica would catch stuff like this judging from what others say on how hard it is to submit stories to it.
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