Good first attempt I thought, although a little short. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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Anonymous01/23/15
need more
The story so far is good but is puzzling without some backstory...for instance, why is Sarah in Hell? She was the one that was murdered and all I saw of her character was a tendency to swear about the boss and some anger issues :) I really hope that isn't enough to head for Hell or I am in trouble!
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keep it going!
Good first attempt I thought, although a little short. Looking forward to the next chapter!
need more
The story so far is good but is puzzling without some backstory...for instance, why is Sarah in Hell? She was the one that was murdered and all I saw of her character was a tendency to swear about the boss and some anger issues :) I really hope that isn't enough to head for Hell or I am in trouble!
I would definitely read further chapters
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