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Vacation Ch. 04

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/08/05

What!

Where's part 1-3? I gotta read those!

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by Anonymous12/02/05

HOT!!!!!!!!!!!!

That story was HOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please write part 5.

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by GEMINI699610/17/06

Delivery Is Everything

Delivery, in the case of our submissions to LIT meaning grammatical delivery and the ability to articulate effectively and be narratively effective will make or break your story. You need to find your narrative voice, you need to revise the grammatical errors because if the story isn't set up correctly then the vision you as the author had won't translate. Give it some revision and bring the story back, one technique I've found to work well is reading the story back to myself out loud, if it doesn't flow smoothly and doesn't arouse me, then it isn't ready to submit.

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