Shy Girl

Good detailed story with a twist

Loved the personality of the characters made for great reading. Glad that charles and the uncle got the boot. Hope that this story continues, just would like to read a finish. it was nice to see that Melissa was not the shy rabbit. Liked her fire....

I like your

New style of writing, your story was very good but you still lack a proper ending unless there is a part two, you writing a part two to finish a story would indeed be a change in writing habit and you might find that you enjoy reading the whole story as well as your readers.

Not Ashson's usual fare

This is an interesting change of pace for you. Kudos for spreading your wings a bit.

Just as others have written, I also enjoyed the break from the norm. A very good story without the usual scenarios that were becoming a bit redundant. While I enjoy all your stories, this was a most welcome addition.