Shadows In The Dark

too many players

by the time you'd intro'd all the characters, there was no room for the fucking

Nice Beginning...

I agree with the earlier comment about there being too many characters ... I'm really not sure who's with
who ... but this implies there will be more to the story, involving some combination of the others, and I'm
looking forward to reading the rest of the story...

Please continue this story line. I loved it.

I loved this story. The surprise and the realization and the fact that she wasn't already bi made this so hot.
You've got a lot of characters and a great scene setup. Why not do more.. perhaps a line of surprize hookups?

Very hot. Great work!

ended too soon

there needs to be more!!! they never made it to the lake!
what better way to get to more sex........ a orgy is definitely waiting.

A great start but there needs to be more...perhaps a second chapter.

More!!!

A great beginning, so many possibilities