Yes, Sir

More please.

You simply must continue with these characters and their developing relationship. Do. Not. Stop!!!

A velvet glove...thanks!

Such a gentle dominance, and a willing surrender.... that he waited the entire year shows his strength of character...... will we get to see her descent into complete Ownership??

Pretty Good

I thought that the first five paragraphs in which Gray gives exposition and sets the context were by far the best part of the story. They were also beautifully written.

The rest of the story seemed a little "caricature-ish." I think it would have worked if the prose was as psychologically probing and as beautifully written as the opening paragraphs. Instead, the dialogue is a little wooden and one-dimensional. It really takes things down a notch, when in fact things are supposed to be heating up.

I really do appreciate the feedback! I have never before posted my own story nor have I ever written any literotica, so all will be taken as suggestions to improve my writing, here and otherwise.

Firm but gentle

Very nice that he doesn't go where so many do, into abuse. He doesn't humiliate her, hurt her, denigrate her, call her names. Just firmly in control, while caring about her. Very nice.