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by Anonymous01/27/15

I am crossing a line...

Okay, never one to criticize someone's work as I understand the labor that comes into writing a piece or an essay. However, I couldn't help notice that there was no character development. Were the quotes conversations or inward thinking? So confused!! I tried to keep up, but couldn't figure out which end was up...
Maybe this is your style of writing, thus the reluctance to criticize. However, keep up the good work, I may have to read some of your other posts to grasp your writing style, when I do, I'll come back and say so...

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