Even for a continuing story, that was abrupt. It's like a movie that didn't finish; they just cut the film at the 30 minute mark. This had potential, but until you can add more, and/or at least have a better segue, you get a 2.
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Anonymous01/28/15
Please contine
Nice start. I like stories where girls have tiny tits. I especially like lesbian stories with girls with tiny tits. Please continue. Thanks for the good start.
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that's it?
Even for a continuing story, that was abrupt. It's like a movie that didn't finish; they just cut the film at the 30 minute mark. This had potential, but until you can add more, and/or at least have a better segue, you get a 2.
Please contine
Nice start. I like stories where girls have tiny tits. I especially like lesbian stories with girls with tiny tits. Please continue. Thanks for the good start.
Sorry I ended it so abruptly
@jed11: I wrote this beforehand, so i'm editing it and releasing it in a chapter format.
nice start
Nice start.... I hope that dungeon bag is really full!
@anonymous: oh it is
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